check it out and be brutal guys !
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I have a Physics test coming up, what should I do? I'm going to check Leonard Susskind's Modern Physics course on YouTube. After a while I became use to watch the courses until I fell asleep, I enjoyed the professor's charisma, and the way he conducted the classes. "I could picture myself in that class" I said to myself.
The small classes are the perfect opportunity to express myself and to be a part of the class, tending to avoid classes that are too passive; and if the class is diverse, that means diverse points of view, making it even more interesting. Another thing great thing are sports, definitely be involved with sports in Sanford; the perfect way to begin or end the day.
Another thing that I find appealing is the access to the six graduate schools, being my great interest in finance; I get the chance to be were the Modern Portfolio Theory was created, and also to share the Falconer Library that has held the great Nobel Prizes of the Stanford Scholar community.
About the location, well, I'll admit it: I am a city mouse. Nothings gets me better than big cities and their active urban life, so San Francisco will make me feel like home.
I hope I can be able to walk into a classroom and say that one day I watched this on YouTube.
Um, if you don't mind me asking, what is the word limit or minimum required of Why Stanford? essay.
I liked how your essay circled back to the idea of watching a Stanford classroom through the comforting lens of youtube, but for the most part, it is extremely weak in its points.
Try not to be so matter-of-factly in your essay. Instead of stating "I have a Physics test coming up... what should I do?", describe the calculations or the formulas or the theories you're studying in physics and use those as pivots so the reader can understand the caliber of the test. ELABORATE, be descriptive. I know it's bad to be lofty, but at this point, lofty is much preferable over your current sparse style and bare diction. Also: learn the placement of modifiers.
Replace "tending" with "in an effort."
I will admit: your essay is all over the place and requires serious overhaul to get it somewhat polished. Perhaps scrap it and start fresh.
Thanks!! Im an international so my writing isn't the best, I'll see what I can do !!
I think this one is a lot better plz give a glance
Quantum Mechanics, Einstein's Relativity, or maybe Newtonian Mechanics, can easily be seen as a bunch of chaotic numbers without the proper preparation. My preparation is Leonard Susskind's YouTube course. Somewhere in my junior year I became use to watch this courses until I fell asleep. "I could Picture me in that class" I said to myself.
My interest in finance wasn't any love at first sight story, but through many years and enough experience, now I'm sure that is what I want to do. At Stanford I get the chance to study where the Modern Portfolio Theory was created, and also to share the Falconer Library that has been cradle of the great Nobel's in economics of the Stanford Scholar community.
At Stanford, I see myself exploring impossible otherwise back in Chile, like the Multidisciplinary Research Initiatives Opportunities linking Natural science with Social science, Economics and Sociology or maybe finance and Politics. Hopefully one day I can be part of the International Initiative.
I really enjoy being near big cities, I'll admit it: I'm a city mouse. My whole life I've been in love with major cities. Maybe it's because I'm a tech addict and being right in the middle of a tech-flourishing machine like San Francisco makes me smile.
I believe I need a place where challenges are a must. A place where diverse classes; make diverse ideas. A place where I can state: I once saw this on YouTube. A place like Stanford.
MAn , you have some serious grammatical mistakes... And stanford wont like it a single bit!!
Just taking your advice and being brutal... but you gotta seriously work on your writing... the ideas are great... but the way you presented it isnt the best!
Aso your tense and verbs are sounding funny to me atleast!
BEst of luck,
Sid
Thanks sid ! its kind of a new thing for me to write essays in english, but that's why I'm here. Would you mind telling me which verbs are the ones causing problems?? a little editing perhaps ?? I'll get back to yours !
Hey have a look at his... kinda revised ure essay!
A mixed feeling of tension and excitement is rushing through me, and i am perplexed on what should i do for the upcming physics test. Trying to go through notes online, l come across Leonard Susskind's Modern Physics course on YouTube. Starting to watch the first course, there is a sudden change in the atmosphere and all of a sudden from a tense, excited young kid, i feel relaxed and confident, enjoying the lectures.
A few years ahead, i see myself a part of these classes, enjoying and learning with the same enthusiasm when i first saw it. Having a small class is the perfect opportunity to express myself and to be a part of the class for in larger , diverse classes, their is bit of passiveness amongst the students ( needs a lil correction) . And Stanford offering its students this privilege of leaning is what sets it apart from many other universities. The campus life Stanford offers is also another factor needs to be taken into account with great offerings in sports which i see myself being an integral part of.
Another thing that I find appealing is the access to the six graduate schools. being greatly interested in finance; In future i would be getting the chance to be where the Modern Portfolio Theory was created, and also to share the Falconer Library that has held the great Nobel Prizes of the Stanford Scholar community.
Though its vast campus, Stanford has a great mix of city life, being located next to San Francisco will give me as a student a bit of both worlds. And I see myself in recent future walking into the classroom I once watched on internet, and being an active member of the class.
I think this sounds way better... and atleast will not be torn to pieces by the stanford offcials...!
CIao
