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"In the name of Jesus Christ" intellectual interests, their evolution -Cornell CAS



numbaone0920 3 / 7  
Dec 24, 2010   #1
[[[PROMPT: College of Arts and Sciences:
Describe your intellectual interests, their evolution, and what makes them exciting to you. Tell us how you will utilize the academic programs in the College of Arts and Sciences to further explore your interests, intended major, or field of study.]]]

Wednesday, December 5, 2001
Dear God,

It's almost Christmas. At church I'm gonna be a lamb in the play at school. Miss Nocito said I was a good lamb. At recess today, David said he asked Santa for a bike. I'm gonna ask him for Gameboy. But can you make sure I don't actually see Santa? Because I'm very scared of him, but I really really really want the bike. I know that you'll do it for me. That's why I love you.

Amen

Wednesday, October 27, 2004
Dear God,

At church, youth group is so fun! I didn't know church was so fun! The other day, we went bowling and Sunday is "Hallelujah Night." I don't really want to dress up as anything though. I think Christine is going to be there though, so I'm excited.

Oh yeah, my mom said my prayers are more powerful than her's, even though I'm younger. She said I should pray for Dad to stop smoking and to be more healthy. So God, please help my dad to stop smoking. Make him go to church and make him love you. He's always away at work all the time and never has any family time. Please let him be a better Christian.

Amen

Wednesday, May 30, 2007
Dear God,

I just found out I'm going to move to Georgia-I'm pretty confused. Why Georgia? There's a song called Why Georgia, and I don't really know what it's about, but that is the story of my life right now: Why Georgia? What's over there anyways, peaches, peaches, and more peaches? Brian made fun of me the other day saying that my parents are going to sell fried peach-skins for business. I had no idea what that was, but it really didn't help that the school I'm going is called Peachtree Ridge High School, which is on Old Peachtree Road.

I just got settled in, it seems like. I've had a crush on Christine for pretty much all of middle school, even when she went out with Justin for a little. I'm especially going to miss my youth group at church. Everyone likes me because I play guitar and the high school girls always call me cute.

This is my first test of faith. I'm going to trust you, God. Help me...

I pray in the name of Jesus Christ,
Amen.

Wednesday, November 12, 2008
Dear God,

At church, I got to play my electric guitar on stage for the first time last week. It was great being on stage watching some 200 kids worship you together. I think this is my calling, God. Anoint me further. I know that I am more musically talented than everyone on praise team, but sometimes I'm not able to use my ability to its potential because I'm not as experienced as others. God, give me the chance to use my talents.

Today is my dad's birthday. Happy birthday, Dad. Too bad he's in Vietnam on another long business trip. Lord, help him quit his smoking habits. More importantly, capture his soul-make him go to church. I cry at night sometimes wanting better for Dad.

In the name of Jesus Christ,
Amen

Wednesday, December 22, 2010
Dear God,

College on my mind. I got some schools that I really want to go to. It seems that every year I realize a little more of my potential, even this year. I know I'm smarter than I was last year, and not as smart as I'll be next year. I really wish I could go back to ninth grade with my twelfth grade brain. Whether I'll go to the school that I want to, I don't know. Whether my dad will stop smoking and start going to church, I don't know.

What I do know is I was wrong to ask for those things. My wants should be Your wants. My heart should match your heart. Lord, I want all these things, but now I lift it up to you. May Your will be done.

In the name of Jesus Christ
Amen.

[[[Please give me some feedback on how to make the essay stronger! I feel like this is a great idea but I just need to capitalize on it more by making it way better! Which sections can I/should I emphasize?]]]

yiyang92 1 / 1  
Dec 24, 2010   #2
Umm, I don't think you've really answered the question of "Tell us how you will utilize the academic programs in the College of Arts and Sciences to further explore your interests, intended major, or field of study". Yes, you've shown that you've had personal growth over the years, but this essay is asking for your ambition, not about your personal character. This essay might work on one of the common app prompts though.


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