I would like to conduct research with Professor Jere R. Behrman. Prof. Behrman's achievements blew me away by the sheer weight of numbers (230 over articles). No doubt he is experienced from his work in international banks and teaching in 40 over countries. What caught my attention were some of the papers he wrote. In 2002, he co-published a paper entitled "Does Increasing Women's Schooling Raise the Schooling of the Next Generation?". His titles, often intriguing, impress on me that he is an interesting man. I also liked the studies that he undertook, which seem to pertain to household behaviors. And perhaps above all, the most important reason lies in his interest in South East Asian Economics where he examines developing countries. Coming from Singapore, I certainly do take an interest in the Southeast Asia region. Prof Behrman is the only Economics professor who has indicated Asian studies as one of his field areas. Thus, I really hope to join him in his research.
Please tell me how I can improve this essay and if there are any errors. THANK YOU!
I think you can reword the phrase "impress on me" to something passive like "give me the impression".
Also make sure you dot the Prof. in your second to last sentence.
In addition, you could elaborate on how your major and interests compare to his works in Economics and Asian studies.
Behrman's achievements blew me away by the sheer weight of numbers (more than 230 articles).
No, no errors! :)
I would not begin a sentence with the words "no doubt." I might change it to, "There can be no doubt that..."