If you had the opportunity to spend one day in New York City with a famous New Yorker, who would it be and what would you do? (Your New Yorker can be anyone -past or present, fictional or nonfictional - who is commonly associated with New York City; they do not necessarily have to have been born and raised in New York.)
I would choose to spend a day in New York City with a cunning, mischevious, spunky, red-headed ten year old; Annie Warbucks. Together Annie and I will explore every nook and cranny of this magnificient city. Two similar spirits bravely endeavoring thorugh a concrete jungle. I would ask Annie of her life during the Great Depression and have the opportunity to learn the perspective of a child living during the stock-market crash. We would compare the modern city and economic crisis to her time's.
the character limit is really causing me to struggle...im just also not sure what i can say...please help!
THANKS SO MUCH!!
Since this is for NYU, focus more on NYC as a city. So emphasize Wall Street during 1929 rather than the Great Depression as a whole. Also, I would take out "concrete jungle." It's a cliche that is clumsily used for pretty much every large city now. Good luck, I'm applying to NYU too!
Thanks for the feedback! what school are you applying to within NYU?
CAS. I was thinking about Gallatin for awhile, but I don't think I'll fit in there, because I know exactly what I want to study haha. What about you?
Steinhardt for vocal performance major
NYU supplement help day in NYC, poem, department
If you had the opportunity to spend one day in New York City with a famous New Yorker, who would it be and what would you do? (Your New Yorker can be anyone -past or present, fictional or nonfictional - who is commonly associated with New York City; they do not necessarily have to have been born and raised in New York.)
I would choose to spend a day in New York City with a cunning, mischevious, spunky, red-headed ten year old; Annie Warbucks. Together Annie and I will explore every nook and cranny of this magnificient city. Two similar spirits bravely endeavoring thorugh a concrete jungle. I would ask Annie of her life during the Great Depression and have the opportunity to learn the perspective of a child living during the stock-market crash. We would compare the modern city and economic crisis to her time's.
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Write a haiku, limerick, or short (eight lines or less) poem that best represents you.
blossoming flower gentle and sweet
brings a smile to those she meets
radiating bold and vibrant tropic flair
this flower's aroma entwines with the City's air
This special flower across the City will spread
How she loves to explore, this wild redhead
This exceptional flower is caring and fierce
To attain her dreams the sky she will pierce
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Please tell us what led you to select your anticipated academic program and/or NYU school/college, and what interests you most about your intended discipline.
It is said that "the world is a stage" and this statement has never been as true as when applied to my life. Since early childhood I have been enraptured by the beauty and power of song. My fascination with vocal performance has developed with fortitude as I embraced every opportunity to perform. My universe is centered around this fiery passion, around my love for singing. NYU Steinhardt offers a sanctuary to unify passion and profession in the heart of the most exciting and inspiring city.
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MANY THANKS!
I like your choice about who you would meet in New York,and your comparision with flowers and dreams is very good in your poem. I can vividly see the comparison as a flower grows with relation to how a dream evolves.
I thought you did a good job on answering the prompts, but i'd change one thing about your New Yorker essay.
Try to combine
"Together Annie and I will explore every nook and cranny of this magnificient city. Two similar spirits bravely endeavoring thorugh a concrete jungle."
maybe instead just put a coma between the two sentences, making it
Together Annie and I will explore every nook and cranny of this magnificient city, two similar spirits bravely endeavoring thorugh a concrete jungle."
Otherwise, the second sentence is a bit awkward, and in fact really isn't a sentence.
But overall, good job. The poem was good, and your other essay was strong.
"endeavoring through a concrete jungle"
This sounds a bit awkward, though i understand the point you are trying to make; try rephrasing it to be a bit more concise.
Also, make sure you capitalize the beginning of each line of your poem.
"It is said that "the world is a stage" and this statement has never been as true as when applied to my life"
I believe this would sound better as two separate sentences:
"It is said that "the world is a stage". This statement has never been as true as when applied to my life."
Beautiful use of vocabulary. I can't find anything else that needs correcting.
Could you check out my NYU supplements as well? Hear is the link, please look at it of you can:
By the way I was just watching Annie on tv today...I love that movie!
Good luck!