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If I had one super power, it would be the ability to control time. Hotchkiss Essay


narryotp 1 / 2 1  
Jan 3, 2015   #1
2. If you could be a superhero or have one "super power," who/what would you choose and why?

The essay has to be max 2000characters and high level. I would really appreciate your help!

If I had one super power, it would be the ability to control time. With my power I would be able to stop, reverse, slow down and speed up time whenever I want to. I chose this power because I hear this question a lot: "If you could go back in time and change something, what would it be?", and with my ability to control time, I can actually do such a thing. The ability to control time would give me power over any situation, and I can help anyone with it.

With my super power, I would most likely to use it to make my life much easier. For example, if I almost trip on the stairs, I can slowly reverse the time and recover without getting a bruise or getting an injury. Also, if one morning I don't feel like waking up or if I think I need more sleep, instead of wasting the time I could be doing something more productive, I would stop the time until I feel like getting up.

While enjoying my super power, I can also help others instead of myself. For example, if there was a car accident, I can reverse the time and try to help make it not happen. I can also (i don't know what to write)

This power would be so nice to have, but at the same time I will have a lot responsibility to deal with. Since I would probably be the only with this power, if people found out my super power, they might ask for my help for a situation they want to change and demand my help. If that did happen, I would need to take care of my self and my decisions while trying not to let people down because I don't like to hurt others feelings.

In conclusion, having the ability to control time is a wonderful thing. It can definitely help me and others in many different shapes and forms. Despite all the responsibility I would need to take in with the super power, I think the super power I chose is well worth it.

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So... was it good in general?
was the spelling/punctuation/grammar ok?
Should I be using more harder vocabuary???
vangiespen - / 4,137 1449  
Jan 3, 2015   #2
Your essay suffers from a tremendous amount of redundancies. You don't have to keep reminding us that you are discussing your super power. You already established that at the start. Constantly opening your paragraphs with a reference to it only deducts from your all too important character count. Revise the opening sentences to simply be an introduction to the subject matter of the full paragraph.

Consider that having the power to reverse time gives you the power to alter history, prevent previous cataclysmic events, or even change the shape of the future. If you find yourself lost as to what to discuss, think back to the history of mankind. What historical events would you want to have been a part of in order to change its outcome? Discuss those events and what you would have done to change the outcome because of your ability to control time. Try not to concentrate on your personal reasons for controlling time. Use an open mind and discuss how you can use time control to help mankind over all. That should help the essay become better.
maximu5 4 / 11 2  
Jan 3, 2015   #3
Just an idea - would you like some restrictions on your superpowers? Like you can fast forward but you cant reverse the time or vice versa, as i think such an addition wont be a burden for your essay. Because unlimited use of the time manipulation, would probably mess up lots of things.
OP narryotp 1 / 2 1  
Jan 4, 2015   #4
thank you very much!
I will revise my essay with the ideas you gave me


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