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"Paper Mosaic" - Stanford Supplement - Roommate Prompt



alyssadlee 4 / 5  
Dec 30, 2009   #1
Hello... I hope you are all having a nice evening! I desperately need help editing this down to 1800 characters and getting feedback on if this actually says anything about me at all. Any comments as soon as possible are incredibly appreciated! Deadline is January 1st :((((

Short Essay
Virtually all of Stanford's undergraduates live on campus. What would you want your future roommate to know about you? Tell us something about you that will help your future roommate -- and us -- know you better.


As I unpack, my boxes are emptied to reveal paper - papers in books, in binders, in notebooks, on Post-Its. While this might lend an impression of obsession, these sheaves of paper reflect the layers of my character.

Many of the operations and interactions of my life are by paper. Lining my walls, desk, and backpack are post-its and lists reminding me of projects and anniversaries while my drawers and folders harbor the more sophisticated cardstock with which I will make every personalized birthday, Christmas, and thank-you card. Despite my obsession with recycling, I almost never throw any paper away, always insisting on its reincarnation as scratch paper, origami cranes, even confetti. It is on these scraps I often jot down witticisms I overhear, a word I have never heard before, or, in a transient flash of inspiration, a line to a poem I have not yet written.

I know my ineluctable accumulation of paper will warrant raised eyebrows and exasperated sighs, but they are an element of my lifestyle that cannot be matched with technology. As much paper as I consume printing assignments or the occasional enlightening article, I handwrite notes and assignments whenever I can, not only because of my penchant for being "old-fashioned" but also because pressings keys on a keyboard is nowhere near as intimate as having a pencil in one hand and paper under your fingertips. With handwriting, I can imprint my thoughts with visual liberty, free to cultivate my specialized system of arrows, noughts, boxes, and lines without the restraints of computerized formatting.

Unlike typing or texting, there is an art to handwriting, a skill derived from the keen physical communication from one's arm to one's fingers involving honing every curve, meticulously ascending the trunk of every 'I', maintaining the impeccable rise and fall of the letters. So you can always expect a handwritten note from me rather than a text message, compounded with a variety of my original calligraphy and nonsensical doodles.

My marriage to paper and handwriting lends itself to a few drawbacks, evidenced by the disarray that pervades my desk and the chronic papercuts and pen marks that adorn my hands. Still, it is a complicated relationship that I cannot abandon. I only hope that you can put up with us. If not, I will be sure to give my apology - by post-it.

2349/1800

sixfoottall 3 / 16  
Dec 30, 2009   #2
wow this is really interesting. :) i think its very original and the writing is really good as well. Well done and good luck with your apps.:)
ngcoel - / 3  
Dec 31, 2009   #3
I enjoyed your essay. Your writing is great and I love the idea and the story. As much as it might pain you, using less complicated/ elevated words and language will help you in a character count. It's pretty, but it does take up space. For example, rather than "lend an impression of obsession" in paragraph one, you could use "indicate obsession." Contractions could also save you a little, I guess. I don't know if you were planning on cutting out chunks, but I wouldn't recommend cutting down the last paragraph. It's clever and a great ending. Maybe parts of the third or fourth paragraph are unnecessary? Just a note, in paragraph two, "despite my obsession with recycling" doesn't make sense because you're clearly recycling your paper. "Because of" or "due to" rather than "despite" would make sense in context. Good work, very original!


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