I'm currently trying to get into a college and I have to write an essay with 3-5 paragraphs. The first 2-3 paragraphs must be about what my career goals are and how would I expect my education at the Art Institute of Seattle to help me attain them? And the last 1-2 paragraphs must be on what ways will I participate and commit to my education in order to be successful?
Well, first off, I really want to get into school for animation, that's what I'm applying for. It's been something I wanted to do since I was a kid. I've always been interested in art, I have a portfolio and I've taken a college credit coarse in 2d art portfolio for my last year of high school. Only thing I do not know how to word my passion for it. I know I'll put full effort into it, it is not an opportunity I will allow to pass me by. I expect my education at this college to help me attain my goals by giving me the experience I need for the job I want. Examples of companies that I'd be really interested in working for in the future are Blizzard and EA Games... I just really need help wording it is all.
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I'd be glad to help give you some ideas. You said an important word: passion. Think about what it is about animation that excites you. You say you've always been interested in art; you might talk a bit about what kinds of works you have in your portfolio. It's good to include your commitment and the amount of effort you are willing to put in. You say "I expect my education at this college to help me attain my goals by giving me the experience I need for the job I want." - Take that very general statement and expand on it: what are the goals it will help you attain? (not just a job at X company, but more specific accomplishments); what experience will the job you hope to attain require? What about those companies you mentioned interests you enough to want to work there? What do they do and what would you like to do for them?
Try writing the essay without worrying about how "good" it is. I will be happy to help you with editing it once you have it fleshed out a bit. Once you have the basic information, we can find words that will help bring it to life a bit more, if it needs it.
I'll look forward to reading it!
Thanks,
Sarah, EssayForum.com
Okay the first three paragraphs are answering the question "What are your career goals and how do you expect your education at the Art Institute of Seattle to help you attain them?" (must be between 2-3 paragraphs). And the final one is what I'm having the most trouble with which is "In what ways will you participate and commit to your education in order to be successful?" (1-2 paragraphs). I know it's not great, 'tis why I'm in need of help... so here's what I've been able to conjure up at the moment:
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My career goals are to attain a career where I can express my artistic talent and passion for art as well as open my mind in ways that I could never do at any other career. To obtain these goals, I must set a track. After looking to many other vantage points resulting in faint success, such as considering the army, attempting to obtain a job at Boeing, and looking into various other art collages, to name a few, I have found that the Art Institute of Seattle has just the programs I'm looking for and just what I need to be successful at my goals.
It has been a life long dream of mine to put my imagination, with my world and characters, into life like animation in such ways as video gaming with three dimensional modeling as well as flash animation with thrilling story-lines that appeal not just to myself, but to other viewers. My portfolio reflects much of my ideas and that of which I am passionate about. The Art Institute of Seattle offers just the right animation programs I need to obtain these goals. Everything from simple flash animation to advanced three dimensional modeling in an interactive digital world.
With this experience, I can gain a career I'll love for the rest of my life. I would be eligible to work at popular gaming and animation companies such as Blizzard, EA Games, and Forgotten Realms, in which I have been a fan of for many years, using skills learned from the Art Institute of Seattle. These skills being two dimensional and three dimensional animation and techniques, story boarding, scripting, and rendering.
I am very strong and passionate about art and how I want to excel it. Therefore, I am strongly willing to participate in what ever programs and activities which are needed to complete my goals in this institute. I am very committed to fulfilling my goals and as so, I will push myself in all ways to succeed and graduate so that I may fulfill my creative dream and to be a proud employee at a large computer gaming and animation industry.
Greetings!
I think it's coming along very well so far! I can give you some editing suggestions.
My goal is [rather than "My career goals are"] to attain a career where I can express my artistic talent and passion for art as well as open my mind in ways that I could never do in any other field [instead of "at any other career"]. To obtain these goals, I must set a track.[I'm not sure what this means--set a track?] After considering many other career opportunities [rather than "looking to many other vantage points resulting in faint success" which sounds somewhat negative], such as [delete "considering" here] the army, attempting to obtain a job at Boeing, and looking into various other art colleges [not collages], to name a few, I have found that the Art Institute of Seattle has just the programs I'm looking for and just what I need to be successful at my goals.
It has been a life-long [add hyphen] dream of mine to put my imagination, with my world and characters, into life-like [add hyphen] animation. I would like to create video gaming with three dimensional modeling as well as flash animation with thrilling story-lines that appeal not just to myself, but to other viewers. My portfolio reflects much of my ideas and that [delete "of"] which I am passionate about. The Art Institute of Seattle offers just the right animation programs I need to obtain these goals--everything from simple flash animation to advanced three dimensional modeling in an interactive digital world.
With this experience, I can gain a career I'll love for the rest of my life. I would be eligible to work at popular gaming and animation companies such as Blizzard, EA Games, and Forgotten Realms, [delete "in"] which I have been a fan of for many years, using skills learned from the Art Institute of Seattle. I want to learn [instead of "These skills being"] two dimensional and three dimensional animation and techniques, story boarding, scripting, and rendering.
I am very passionate about art and want to excel in it. Therefore, I am [delete "strongly"] willing to participate in whatever programs and activities which are needed to complete my goals in this institute. I am very committed to fulfilling my goals and as so, I will push myself in all ways to succeed and graduate so that I may fulfill my creative dream and to be a proud part of the [delete "employee at a large"] computer gaming and animation industry.
You haven't really specifically answered the question "In what ways will you participate and commit to your education in order to be successful?" They want to know if you are willing to put in the time studying, give up outside activities which may interfere with your education and embrace activities which will enhance it, like joining organizations connected to your major. See if you can come up with a little more detail to answer this question.
Good work!
Thanks,
Sarah, EssayForum.com