Prompt: Describe the world you come from; for example, your family, clubs, school, community, city, or town. How has that world shaped your dreams and aspirations?(*) (200-250 words)
Essay: Both of my parents are immigrants from India who grew up in relatively poor conditions. Additionally, both had polio, which resulted in challenging childhoods with physical challenges that continue into adulthood. Despite this, they both pursued engineering careers through perseverance and hard work. I grew up seeing their perseverance both in parenting and maintaining challenging engineering careers. As a result, they influenced me to become perseverant and hard-working myself. Additionally, my parents motivated me academically at a young age through discipline, resulting in me working diligently and productively in schools, performing well. My high school happened to offer many challenging and diverse courses, many of which were in the STEM fields. Furthermore, my parents encouraged me to take university level courses in physics. I took advantage of these opportunities, and quickly became fascinated by the power of the human intellect in areas such as physics. Due to this exposure, I've been self-motivated to delve deeper into learning about the great achievements of the scientific community, and keeping up to date with its ongoing "cutting-edge" progress. The combination of my parents' motivation and my high school and university academic rigor shaped my aspirations that center on pushing the frontiers of scientific knowledge through research.
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Essay: Both of my parents are immigrants from India who grew up in relatively poor conditions. Additionally, both had polio, which resulted in challenging childhoods with physical challenges that continue into adulthood. Despite this, they both pursued engineering careers through perseverance and hard work. I grew up seeing their perseverance both in parenting and maintaining challenging engineering careers. As a result, they influenced me to become perseverant and hard-working myself. Additionally, my parents motivated me academically at a young age through discipline, resulting in me working diligently and productively in schools, performing well. My high school happened to offer many challenging and diverse courses, many of which were in the STEM fields. Furthermore, my parents encouraged me to take university level courses in physics. I took advantage of these opportunities, and quickly became fascinated by the power of the human intellect in areas such as physics. Due to this exposure, I've been self-motivated to delve deeper into learning about the great achievements of the scientific community, and keeping up to date with its ongoing "cutting-edge" progress. The combination of my parents' motivation and my high school and university academic rigor shaped my aspirations that center on pushing the frontiers of scientific knowledge through research.
Rewrite: https://essayforum.com/undergraduate/rewrite-short-word-mit-admissions-world-come-72843/
