UC 1) My passion for the english language

1) What is your intended major? Discuss how your interest in the subject developed and describe any experience you have had in the field - such as volunteer work, internships and employment, participation in student organizations and activities - and what you have gained from your involvement

My passion for English has been the most consistent asepct of my personality. I've gone through many phases, from a punkrocker that despised the pervasive greed of this country, to nearly enlisting in the Marine Corps to defend it. Through all of my teenage angst and philosophical searching, there has been one constant in my life, my love to read and write.

It began as a hobby,my earliest experience occured when I was seven and got my first short story published in the newspaper after winning a contest. From then on, it became an addiction. During my teenage years , I rediscovered my love as a means of catharsis. This was instrumental in my development as a person and really cemented my appreciation for writing, but for some reason I never connected my lifelong enjoyment with the academic side of English. That's why I didn't immediately choose to major in English and wasted my time contemplating becoming an astrophysicist or psychologist. I came to realize these were not realistic choices because I was focusing on the destination rather than the journey. After two of my friends who attend UCLA and Cal told me how much they looked forward to going to their classes with Prof. Lowell Gallagher and Prof. Elizabeth Abel, respectively, I realized that I want to major in a subject I love at the most academically rigiorous University I can attend. English is the one subject that seems to come naturally to me; I truly love it and am willing to do whatever it takes to succeed at a UC and reach my full potential as a writer.

My only regret is that I didn't realize this sooner, as I was confused my second semester and put too much pressure on myself to plan the rest of my life instead of just studying something I enjoy. My frustration over my lack of a major caused me to focus more on my job (where I was working forty hours a week) than my school work. When I saw my grades for that semester I was devasted to receive a B in English. I believe there is always a lesson to be learned, and I have definitely learned my lesson. That is why a copy of my grades from that semester is hanging up in my room, as a promise to never disapoint myself again by not putting forth my best effort.

i think "did not" is better than "didn't" for the admission essay
same for that's --> that is
my english teacher said don't put apostrophe such as did not, could not, is not, etc...

It began as a hobby,my earliest experience occured when I was seven and got my first short story published in the newspaper after winning a contest. From then on, it became an addiction.

It began as my hobby, and my earliest experience occured when I was seven year old.
My first short story was published in the newspaper after winning contest.
in my opinion, i think it looks better... =) since you are writing new paragraph, i would put writing and reading rather than "it"

ALSO..
My only regret is that I didn't realize this sooner, as I was confused my second semester and put too much pressure on myself to plan the rest of my life instead of just studying something I enjoy. My frustration over my lack of a major caused me to focus more on my job (where I was working forty hours a week) than my school work. When I saw my grades for that semester I was devasted to receive a B in English.

do you need this paragraph since you are writing about your passion for the english language??
you can write about more passions instead of writing your regret..

these are just my opinions.. if you don't like it, you can just wait for another answer!!
but i hope this helps!

...and philosophical searching, one constant has remained in my life: my love of reading and writing.

My frustration over my lack of a major caused me to focus more on my full-time job (where I was working forty hours a week) than my school work.

Actually... maybe like this:
My frustration over my lack of a major and my full time job led me to a lack of i nspiration. caused me to focus more on my job (where I was working forty hours a week) than my school work.