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English is no longer a foreign language; it is now a global language. IELTS TASK 2.



bottles 3 / 11  
May 1, 2016   #1
Question: The advantages brought by the spread of English as a "global language" will outweigh the disadvantages. To what extend do you agree or disagree with this view?

Respond:

It is no doubt true that English language has already played a dominant role in the world. Some people argue that this social phenomenon is not a good trend while others hold an opposite idea. This essay will discuss both of these two opinions.

On the one hand, English language is essential in our daily life in terms of work, study, and life. Many international corporations choose English as their business language during numerous commercial conferences; a lot of prestigious universities select English as their main teaching language; English boards and signs can be found everywhere in a big city. People use English to transfer their ideas and feelings, to achieve business targets, and to gain more teaching resources. Needless to say, English is very important, and users should give priority to learn this language.

On the other hand, it may also be harmful to the cultural diversity. There are millions of countries with diverse languages. If citizens all over the world used the same language, they might lose their valuable cultural heritage. For example, many American Indian languages have permanently vanished after cultural assimilation because stronger and bigger language has a huge impact on smaller countries. This could definitely be a huge loss to all human beings.

In conclusion, by introducing English language, people can be provided with the opportunities to talk to and learn from each other; however, people should also take action to preserve or revive their mother tongue.
suxiaojing 13 / 15  
May 2, 2016   #2
Hi, bottles:

I think your essay is understandable, but it is better if you can put your own opinion in the first paragraph, because your essay seems like answering the question"discuss both opinions" rather than"agree or disagree"

Also, the topic focus on "advantages outweigh disadvantages" However, you didn't show if the advantages outweigh disadvantages...

You just list the advantages and disadvantages of speaking English.

So, Actually, you didn't answer the question.

i hope if you support"advantages outweigh disadvantages", you should list more ideas to support this opinion and explain your ideas in details.

At the same time, use"admittedly" to oppose the opinion that you don't agree with.In that way, you can make your essay clear and stronger.

Hope that can help you!
suxiaojing 13 / 15  
May 2, 2016   #3
Hi,,,
Also I notice that you said you need to finish your essay in 30minutes so you don't have enough time to shape your idea and word.

Actually when I practice my essay, I can finish it on time even though sometimes it is more than 300 words, so you should practice more to make sure you have enough range of vocabulary and express your ideas smoothly so that when you answer your IELTS essay, you will find you don't need to spend much time on your sentences and words, you just need to answer the question.

Keep writing!!


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