'passion for saxophone' - Additional Information about Myself

Honestly, I did not really do well in my early high school years. My focus was on video games and computer games instead of studies. Then, gradually, I became some-what anti-social. I spent most of my free time not studying, but playing games. My attentionïinterestïwas on games and games only. However, my dad's friend who is a professional saxophone player suggested finding a hobbyïsuch as playing saxophoneïafter listening to my parents' concerns. I started saxophone right away. I wanted to get rid of my bad habit and addiction as fast as I could. I cannot explain in words how it was effective. My whole attention changed from games to saxophoneïall my time was used in practicing, practicing, practicing. Then, I felt good about myselfïI had stopped wasting my time on games. When I started feeling good about myself, I started practicingïif it was even possibleïmore. Finally, in less than half a year, I joined one of the bands in my school.

My passion for saxophone didn't end thereïit didn't end when I moved to another school with no band, strings whatsoever. I played saxophone in the school musical every single time, and even did solo pieces. As time went by, I got better and better, and that encouraged me to do even better. It's like playing in a soccer gameïone who scores, scores every time. One who knows the feeling of winning always wants to win. As I reached my goals one by one, I felt satisfied about myselfïI felt accomplished.

As soon as I started feeling that pride, I thought that I could use that same method in my studies, and I did. I started to accomplish goals little by littleïmy grades started to rise. From low grades, I started to get decent ones. But to me, the grades didn't matter. The one thing that I cared about was that I knew what was going on in class; I understood what I was taught. Like playing the saxophone, I devoted in studying, and I succeeded. Attending (school name), I am sure I can use this passionate side of me to do my best, and succeed.

Hi,

Lets make this sleek and trimmed by taking out what is unnecessary:

I did not perform as well, academically, as I should have during my early high school years. My focus was on video and computer games instead of studies. Gradually , I became somewhat anti-social. However, my dad's friend who is a professional saxophone player suggested finding a hobby-such as playing saxophone-after listening to my parents' concerns. I started saxophone right away.

I took out some sentences that were unnecessary: I spent most of my free time not studying, but playing games. My attention-interest-was on games and games only.

I like how you connected the saxophone success to your plans for college. Good luck!!

Kevin

Thank you so much!
It helped a lot^^