what do you get from this essay as far as who I am? what kind of personality do I convey? and how's the writing? thanks!
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When some hear home-schooling, they either envision a pajama-wearing child chained to their kitchen table with parents shouting the Pythagorean Theorem until the child sheds tears, or an incredibly dense student who fabricates their education in pursuit of video games. This is our label. This is how we are portrayed.
My parents did not home-school me to shield me from the world, but to emerge as a prominent member of it. Neither of my parents earned a college degree, so they desired that I could have more opportunities. When I reached enrollment age, they decided I needed greater challenges, therefore, my mom kept me home and taught me herself.
As I grew, school was not only a time to learn, but a time to reflect. I received individual attention and instruction that enabled me to mold my inner voice. I understood more than the subject I studied; I comprehended its impact on me. I determined what I wanted, what I needed, and what I lacked. I may not have been surrounded by twenty children in my classroom, but I did become acquainted with myself. I became slightly introspective and increasingly independent.
That is not to say I am a loner. In fact, I love people. Without students inhabiting the halls of my school, I harnessed my extroverted side to make friends. As I actively sought friendships, I exercised my flexible schedule to pursue a variety of my interests. I immersed myself in various extra curricular activities, collecting a vibrant community of friends. As a result, I have friends of all races, political views, and economic backgrounds who continuously widen my perspective with every interaction. I owe my adaptability, and my social life, to opportunities home-schooling presented me.
Some people, however, do not understand my unconventional education. In their mind, I am stationed on my living room sofa watching recent Spongebob episodes, the sky growing dimmer as my intellect declines. In reality, my living room much resembles a classroom, adorned with educational charts and posters on every centimeter of its walls. I motivated myself to progress my education rather than relying on another for my success. Games my mom arranged such as the Tower--featuring my third grade self connecting leggo blocks for every correct answer, resulting in a skyscraper--led to my passion for learning. School was always exciting, always fun, and I loved it.
Okay, I will admit, sometimes I do school in my pajamas; but I also attend concerts. I observe pop culture. I talk to my friends on the phone. I am no more obscure than the average teenage girl. Rather than allowing the "home-school" label to handicap me, I challenge it, using homeschooling to extensively utilize my abilities. Although a new and very scary chapter of my life approaches, I serve as evidence that homeschooling can create a powerful urge to make an impact. I am evidence that labels can be overturned. I am evidence that people are not always what they are perceived to be.
When some hear home-schooling, they either envision a pajama-wearing child chained to their kitchen table with parents shouting the Pythagorean Theorem until the child sheds tears, or an incredibly dense student who fabricates their education in pursuit of video games. This is our label. This is how we are portrayed.
Very impressive : )
As a result, I have friends of all races, political views, and economic backgrounds who continuously widen my perspective with every interaction. I owe my adaptability, and my social life, to opportunities home-schooling presented me.
------ Very strong line : )
Rather than allowing the "home-school" label to handicap me, I challenge it, using homeschooling to extensively utilize my abilities.
.... another strong one
I am evidence that people are not always what they are perceived to be.
... Great ending :)
Well... I'm speachless : ) I loved every line of it and this itself proves that homeschooling needs to be given its due recognition : )
Excellent job and Good Luck!
Hello,
I'll be harsh for a moment. I read your essay wanting to really love it. I really did. However, it is just really dull and underwhelming. Homeschooling is not a handicap in fact each year many home-schooled students get accepted to some of the most prestigious colleges around the World. However there is nothing fantastic about this essay. You will be competing against students who have traveled the world, invented a new type of microchip, started a business, ran for political office etc...I wanted you to elaborate on something that you have done above an beyond the call of duty, something where you exhibit some passion. As it stands right now this essay is very flat and really does not do you any favors. -AAO
Hope this helps
thanks so much, everyone!
I wasn't trying to say that home schooling is a handicap, but how people stereotype me because of it is. With that being said, I have a lot of achievements, but wasn't sure if I should include any in my essay because of the extra curricular section. Do you think I should somehow sneak one or two into my essay to tie in concrete examples of how home schooling has shaped me?
