Prompt: Tell a story from your life, describing an experience that either demonstrates your character or helped to shape it
can i cutback to less than 300 words, how so? is this a good essay?
I was driving home from a party on a Saturday night. It must have been around 10 o' clock, the road was slippery from a steady rain all afternoon, but my dad's heavy duty truck tires drove with ease. As I pushed in the brake pedal going down a steep hill, my headlights caught a scene that frightened me- two cars, A Subaru that had skidded onto the side of the road, and a crushed minivan with a family inside. Just a moment before I had been driving along at ease with my favorite rock station on the radio, now a very serious accident had presented itself in front of me, and I was the first responder. The initial fear of seeing the accident had already subsided; I knew I needed to act calmly and rationally. I put my hazards on, jumped out of my truck and ran to the minivan. The Subaru was closer but the driver had already left her vehicle; she was in distress but not hurt. I quickly helped the children and their mother out of their car and onto the side of the road to safety. The mother carried a small baby in her arms that managed to sleep through the entire ordeal. After the initial adrenaline rush, I was relieved to discover no one was hurt, only a costly insurance claim. I guided the cars to a nearby park where they would not block traffic and called the local police non emergency number. As I drove home, the events played through my head. At first I thought it was no big deal, after all, no one was hurt, everyone was alright. Then I thought, "would things have turned out alright if I wasn't there to help?". The drivers of the car where in obvious distress, but my calm and level headed attitude helped organize out the situation and ensured everyone was alright. The accident I faced that night reminds me that a calm, logical thinking pattern is essential to many tricky situations that I had and will encounter in my life.
can i cutback to less than 300 words, how so? is this a good essay?
I was driving home from a party on a Saturday night. It must have been around 10 o' clock, the road was slippery from a steady rain all afternoon, but my dad's heavy duty truck tires drove with ease. As I pushed in the brake pedal going down a steep hill, my headlights caught a scene that frightened me- two cars, A Subaru that had skidded onto the side of the road, and a crushed minivan with a family inside. Just a moment before I had been driving along at ease with my favorite rock station on the radio, now a very serious accident had presented itself in front of me, and I was the first responder. The initial fear of seeing the accident had already subsided; I knew I needed to act calmly and rationally. I put my hazards on, jumped out of my truck and ran to the minivan. The Subaru was closer but the driver had already left her vehicle; she was in distress but not hurt. I quickly helped the children and their mother out of their car and onto the side of the road to safety. The mother carried a small baby in her arms that managed to sleep through the entire ordeal. After the initial adrenaline rush, I was relieved to discover no one was hurt, only a costly insurance claim. I guided the cars to a nearby park where they would not block traffic and called the local police non emergency number. As I drove home, the events played through my head. At first I thought it was no big deal, after all, no one was hurt, everyone was alright. Then I thought, "would things have turned out alright if I wasn't there to help?". The drivers of the car where in obvious distress, but my calm and level headed attitude helped organize out the situation and ensured everyone was alright. The accident I faced that night reminds me that a calm, logical thinking pattern is essential to many tricky situations that I had and will encounter in my life.