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Physical therapy or other career - application essay

tisbella 1 / -  
Mar 18, 2008   #1
When I was younger, I always wanted to be a model. I say no to that and thought about being an engineer. I took classes for that in high school and thought it was hard. So, a big no to that. Right now I'm thinking about being a physical therapist. As you can see, I've been changing my mind a lot and that's normal. In the future I want to be happy regardless of what I choose to do.

My goal is to attain a rewarding career in the field of physical therapy. I love to help people and I love to learn more things about the body. In order to be a physical therapist I have to have goals that would lead me to this career.
EF_Team2 1 / 1,708  
Mar 19, 2008   #2

It would help if I knew the purpose of your essay. Is this for an admissions essay to a university? Or for an English class? Or something else?

Here are some editing tips on what you have so far:

I said no to that and thought about becoming an engineer.

You seem to start out saying you are not sure whether you really want to be a physical therapist. Then, in the second paragraph, you call it your "goal" and seem certain of it. You might want to consider which approach you want; you can't really have it both ways.

I hope this helps!


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