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cag18 2 / 6  
Dec 30, 2013   #1
Describe a place or environment where you are perfectly content. What do you do or experience there, and why is it meaningful to you?

Cruising through the streets, a million images appear before me. Children play in the park while their mothers supervise and a pack of dogs wander endlessly through an abandoned dirt-filed lot. The Velvet Underground's album, "The Velvet Underground and Nico", serves as the soundtrack to the scenery (or The scenery is set to the soundtrack of....). As the car turns sideways, I see cars lining up at the gas station, elderly ladies going grocery shopping with their pink plastic grocery bags, people exiting the town bank, and multitude of fast food restaurants at each side of the street. I hear students laughing as they head to school and cars honking as families desperately wait to receive their order through McDonald's drive-thru. As night paints the town, the city lights illuminate the streets. The car comes to a stop as the traffic lights ahead of us turn red. All this sceneries present themselves as I am seated in my car's passenger seat.

In the comfort of a car's passenger seat, I am presented with a window to the outside world where I am able to view and appreciate my surroundings. Whether it is a road trip or drive to the local supermarket, I am excited about the journey ahead. Just to see so many images fascinate me and fills me with ideas. It is a way to escape from stressful situations and to find relieve. The state I find myself in a car seat enables me to be free from distractions that might present themselves otherwise somewhere else. With time to fully concentrate on my thoughts, I am able to gain a clear perspective on several matters that might trouble me. My mind is free to wander and be creative. A million ideas and thoughts race through my mind. It is also a very nostalgic place for me because I am reminded of past experiences while on family road trips. The surrounding scenery triggers old memories to come back. Sceneries of nature come to mind. Through the passenger seat, I come in contact with nature and my surroundings. Photos I see as I scroll down on Tumblr come to life.

Thanks to the passenger seat I become fully aware of my environment. Being aware of my environment is important to me because I feel that my surroundings and neighborhood reveals much about my identity. Observing nature and how people behave has always been a passion of mine. This kind of experience has transformed into an observant individual. I love to see how people interact with each other daily. To learn how the environment influences their actions and way of thought. Through the passenger seat, I am able to quench my thirst for learning. Roaming through the streets offers a different type of learning that goes beyond the four walls of a classroom. Seeing all these different activities going on around me inspires wonder and questions in me. Seeing all these different activities going on around me inspires wonder and questions in me. Questions that ask how a certain place came to be and how it has changed since come to mind. From the smallest and most mundane things possible inspiration is found. The car passenger seat serves as an influence for me to be a well-rounded and diverse individual.

rbuttar14 6 / 11  
Dec 30, 2013   #2
I really like the idea of your essay. You have a good start, but there are some areas that you can elaborate on. For example, "In a way, these observations reveal much about my identity". How so? How do these observations reveal your identity.

Just to see so many images is an exciting experience ? Maybe, I dont know if you forgot a word or a spelling error.
ByTheWay23 1 / 6  
Jan 2, 2014   #3
I like the first essay better. Both are good though
lilly1218 5 / 16  
Jan 2, 2014   #4
I agree, I like the first one because it does more showing than telling. I like the descriptive approach you took on it :)
good luck!
dumi 1 / 6793  
Jan 13, 2014   #5
It is a way to escape from what might be a stressful inside the house

.... I feel you should improve this sentence.
It is a way of escaping from stressed daily routine. .... just a suggestion.

and people crossing the border.

... do you mean people crossing yellow lines?

In the car seat I am able to do what I enjoy.

... I don't see much gravity in this idea. What can you do to enjoy just being in a car? You need to explain, otherwise it does not carry much weight.


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