So, could anyone please take a look at the grammar and punctuation. Also suggest places I can cut or join sentences to cut 20 words as it exceeds the word limit.
However,the order of events can't be changed since it came that way.
My initial intention in volunteering at The Citizens Foundation's summer camp for underprivileged children, was to play a constructive role in educating my society. However,after two successive years of participation, I was awarded by being selected as a supervisor for the program itself. My preliminary task was to design a curriculum for the program with an emphasis on improving the pupils' spoken English and social skills. During it's course, I ensured a smooth conduct of daily affairs at the three participating schools. Also, I assisted my fellow volunteers in understanding their respective roles and the importance of ignoring the social-gap to effectively bond with the children. The debriefings and group activities suggested by my mentor at the NGO helped in this regard. Our tireless efforts resulted in the children: who originally were unable to communicate in English in their classrooms, to present a play in front of the whole school, at the closing ceremony. The beaming innocent faces,and the fact that some even cried while seeing us leave reassured us that we did touch some hearts,and minds. The program did teach me some predictable things-- leadership, management, and responsibility-- but my learning was not limited to that. Having a close proximity to the management gave me an insight into the operational structure of an NGO. Additionally, I also learned the importance of a democracy: as a middle ground between two opposing suggestions was required while planning group activities. The experience was such that I would let it be a catalyst for me to pursue such endeavors in the future.
However,the order of events can't be changed since it came that way.
My initial intention in volunteering at The Citizens Foundation's summer camp for underprivileged children, was to play a constructive role in educating my society. However,after two successive years of participation, I was awarded by being selected as a supervisor for the program itself. My preliminary task was to design a curriculum for the program with an emphasis on improving the pupils' spoken English and social skills. During it's course, I ensured a smooth conduct of daily affairs at the three participating schools. Also, I assisted my fellow volunteers in understanding their respective roles and the importance of ignoring the social-gap to effectively bond with the children. The debriefings and group activities suggested by my mentor at the NGO helped in this regard. Our tireless efforts resulted in the children: who originally were unable to communicate in English in their classrooms, to present a play in front of the whole school, at the closing ceremony. The beaming innocent faces,and the fact that some even cried while seeing us leave reassured us that we did touch some hearts,and minds. The program did teach me some predictable things-- leadership, management, and responsibility-- but my learning was not limited to that. Having a close proximity to the management gave me an insight into the operational structure of an NGO. Additionally, I also learned the importance of a democracy: as a middle ground between two opposing suggestions was required while planning group activities. The experience was such that I would let it be a catalyst for me to pursue such endeavors in the future.
