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"Popular university" - the top five reasons you want to attend Virginia Tech?



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Dec 26, 2010   #1
There are countless reasons which have made Virginia Tech the best university for me to study Engineering. The university is one of few universities which are ranked best for the program of aerospace engineering in the world. The availability of this program of study made me envious; which is my dream from the childhood itself that I vowed to fulfill. This is my first choice university due to its diversity where there are numbers of students from all over the world with different languages, cultures, religions and so on. As I am from different culture than American I enjoy most with diverse people sharing my culture, tradition and language and learning about others' cultures. Additionally the university is renowned for best university of world on in science, technology, engineering, and professional programs where numerous Bachelors and Master degrees are available. The 16:1 student-faculty ratio will make academic life better, as there will be enough staff attention in the classroom with less student distraction. Blacksburg is a beautiful town; a typical rural college town full of restaurants, bars, and clubs and with diverse people and fabulous atmosphere. The park and hiking trail in the campuses are perfect place to enjoy the free time. The weather of this place is moderate which I enjoy the most. This popular university is my dream school where I can persuade my education on highest level with easy access to research and expert professors.

Codric - / 17  
Dec 27, 2010   #2
There are countless reasons which have made Virginia Tech the best university for me to study Engineering. The university is one of few universities which are ranked best for the program of aerospace engineering in the world. The availability of this program of study made me envious; which is my dream from the childhood itself that I vowed to fulfill. This is my first choice university due to its diversity where there are numbers of students from all over the world with different languages, cultures, religions and so on. (I would separate the paragraphs here) As I am from a different culture than American I enjoy most with diverse people sharing my culture, tradition and language and learning about others' cultures. Additionally the university is renowned for best university of world on in science, technology, engineering, and professional programs where numerous Bachelors and Master degrees are available. The 16:1 student-faculty ratio will make academic life better, as there will be enough staff attention in the classroom with less student distraction. Blacksburg is a beautiful town; a typical rural college town full of restaurants, bars, and clubs and with diverse people and fabulous atmosphere. The park and hiking trail in the campuses are perfect place to enjoy the free time. The weather of this placethe region is moderate, which I enjoy the most. This popular university is my dream school where I can persuade my education on highest level with easy access to research and expert professors.

There were some grammatical issues that had to be resolved, but it's almost to be expected. The most important things to correct are highlighted in red; you have the balance of professionalism and voice figured out, so unless the essay is supposed to be a single paragraph, I would reccomend you seperate the block into two, and flesh them out slightly if you can.

Good luck on your acceptance!


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