topic--Please tell us how you have spent the last two summers (or vacations between school years), including any jobs you have held, if not already detailed on the Common Application....
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I am always blissful during summer vacations as it grants me to pursue all the activities that I adore and for which I usually do not have time due to my rote routine school life.
I love to spend time with my loved ones and summer holidays are perfect for spending time with them. We spend more time in sharing our day to day experience, thoughts, feelings, etc. In my family, it has been a tradition to go on a trip during each summer. In summers of 2011 we went to Kashmir, the world's most marvelous place, in a purpose to explore the beauty of nature. We have had a ride on shikara (a type of boat) in the Dal Lake, visited top of a mountain peak and been to numerous sightseeing in the trip. The crystal clear river, the pure white ice and the lovely atmosphere in Kashmir was just amazing. In contrast to the purpose of our Kashmir trip in 2011, the purpose of our Mumbai trip, in summers of 2012, was shopping. We also visited water kingdom and Gateway of India during our Mumbai trip. It was lovely experience.
After the trips, I spend the remaining days of my vacation by engaging in my favorite activities. I regularly play tennis at 6:30 in morning at Sarita Sagar Club. Often on a large gathering of members in the club we held a small knockout tournament among us which results in to a lot of fun. I also play volleyball during night with my friends in our society club.
Beside this, I also spent my time in the backyard of my home drawing and painting. This helps me to refresh my mind and relax myself. The drawing and painting gives me time to escape from worldly stress and help me to explore my inner thinking and feelings.
My engineering passion has engaged me in making small science models which are made using the garbage and waste of home. I am inspired by Arvind Gupta who has mastery in making science models from garbage. To continue my engineering passion I have also visited to Lexus Machinery, world's one of the leading company is making machines that are used in diamond manufacturing process, where I learned different purposes of different machines used in diamond manufacturing. Mr. Janak Mistry head of Lexus Machinery himself explained me the purposes of all these machines, as he was a childhood friend of my father. I was astonished by the accuracy of diamond laser cutting machine and the engineering involved in it to produce the result.
Summers are always full of new experiences and opportunity for me.
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I am always blissful during summer vacations as it grants me to pursue all the activities that I adore and for which I usually do not have time due to my rote routine school life.
I love to spend time with my loved ones and summer holidays are perfect for spending time with them. We spend more time in sharing our day to day experience, thoughts, feelings, etc. In my family, it has been a tradition to go on a trip during each summer. In summers of 2011 we went to Kashmir, the world's most marvelous place, in a purpose to explore the beauty of nature. We have had a ride on shikara (a type of boat) in the Dal Lake, visited top of a mountain peak and been to numerous sightseeing in the trip. The crystal clear river, the pure white ice and the lovely atmosphere in Kashmir was just amazing. In contrast to the purpose of our Kashmir trip in 2011, the purpose of our Mumbai trip, in summers of 2012, was shopping. We also visited water kingdom and Gateway of India during our Mumbai trip. It was lovely experience.
After the trips, I spend the remaining days of my vacation by engaging in my favorite activities. I regularly play tennis at 6:30 in morning at Sarita Sagar Club. Often on a large gathering of members in the club we held a small knockout tournament among us which results in to a lot of fun. I also play volleyball during night with my friends in our society club.
Beside this, I also spent my time in the backyard of my home drawing and painting. This helps me to refresh my mind and relax myself. The drawing and painting gives me time to escape from worldly stress and help me to explore my inner thinking and feelings.
My engineering passion has engaged me in making small science models which are made using the garbage and waste of home. I am inspired by Arvind Gupta who has mastery in making science models from garbage. To continue my engineering passion I have also visited to Lexus Machinery, world's one of the leading company is making machines that are used in diamond manufacturing process, where I learned different purposes of different machines used in diamond manufacturing. Mr. Janak Mistry head of Lexus Machinery himself explained me the purposes of all these machines, as he was a childhood friend of my father. I was astonished by the accuracy of diamond laser cutting machine and the engineering involved in it to produce the result.
Summers are always full of new experiences and opportunity for me.
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