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prompt: evaluate a significant experience, achievement, risk you have taken, or ethical dilemma you have faced and its impact on you.
Having been raised in a financially prosper economy, my priorities had always been related to owning luxuries, rather that excelling at my studies. I had never taken advantage of attending a school which provided me with resources I considered would prepare me for a successful future.
During my early teenage years I had been academically content with myself as long as I earned decent grades. My perspective of life drastically changed once my parents could no longer afford paying for my education; at a school I had attended ever since I was in kindergarten. Fright of the unknown took over me. Never before had I been placed in a new environment, where I was unaware of whom my peers were. Would I be able to make new friends? Would I have any common interest with my new classmates? Questions like these took over my mind and filled me with anxiety.
What I considered worsen my situation, was that I found myself having to attend a new school at the same time in which my father decided to immigrate in search of a job opportunity. Having to live through a situation that is out of one's control is a whirlwind of feelings in itself.
I was filled with uncertainty in regards to whether I would be able to succeed academically or socially. The primary challenge I was to face was that of getting accustomed to classes which were solely taught in Spanish. While having to relate with my classmates whose backgrounds differed greatly from mine; it was then that through my willingness to surpass this challenge I was able to discover several common interests we had, especially that of a great sense of humor.
During this transition I realized that even though I was no longer able to spend as much time with my past friends, I was still in a school, with grades that had to be achieved. Something I knew I could control; something I would do. What I desired the most at that moment was being able to express my gratitude towards my parents through the effort my grades represented.
Through this moment I got to acknowledge that, unknowingly, I had lived in a bubble that needed bursting. New self-made opportunities came with the years. My grades had never been better, and life itself gave me the opportunity to return to the school which had seen me grow. I knew that the person returning to this environment was no longer that same girl, whose happiness relied on owning the latest technological devices, or using expensive clothing.
When living in a country like mine, and having been privileged throughout my whole life, even when the majority isn't, the pleasantries life gave me used to seem not as meaningful. If it had not been for this early life lesson I'm sure that I would not be who I am today, a person with drive, purposes and motivation.
THANKSSSSSSSS FOR READING IT !!!
prompt: evaluate a significant experience, achievement, risk you have taken, or ethical dilemma you have faced and its impact on you.
Having been raised in a financially prosper economy, my priorities had always been related to owning luxuries, rather that excelling at my studies. I had never taken advantage of attending a school which provided me with resources I considered would prepare me for a successful future.
During my early teenage years I had been academically content with myself as long as I earned decent grades. My perspective of life drastically changed once my parents could no longer afford paying for my education; at a school I had attended ever since I was in kindergarten. Fright of the unknown took over me. Never before had I been placed in a new environment, where I was unaware of whom my peers were. Would I be able to make new friends? Would I have any common interest with my new classmates? Questions like these took over my mind and filled me with anxiety.
What I considered worsen my situation, was that I found myself having to attend a new school at the same time in which my father decided to immigrate in search of a job opportunity. Having to live through a situation that is out of one's control is a whirlwind of feelings in itself.
I was filled with uncertainty in regards to whether I would be able to succeed academically or socially. The primary challenge I was to face was that of getting accustomed to classes which were solely taught in Spanish. While having to relate with my classmates whose backgrounds differed greatly from mine; it was then that through my willingness to surpass this challenge I was able to discover several common interests we had, especially that of a great sense of humor.
During this transition I realized that even though I was no longer able to spend as much time with my past friends, I was still in a school, with grades that had to be achieved. Something I knew I could control; something I would do. What I desired the most at that moment was being able to express my gratitude towards my parents through the effort my grades represented.
Through this moment I got to acknowledge that, unknowingly, I had lived in a bubble that needed bursting. New self-made opportunities came with the years. My grades had never been better, and life itself gave me the opportunity to return to the school which had seen me grow. I knew that the person returning to this environment was no longer that same girl, whose happiness relied on owning the latest technological devices, or using expensive clothing.
When living in a country like mine, and having been privileged throughout my whole life, even when the majority isn't, the pleasantries life gave me used to seem not as meaningful. If it had not been for this early life lesson I'm sure that I would not be who I am today, a person with drive, purposes and motivation.
THANKSSSSSSSS FOR READING IT !!!