I believe I have finished my essay, I am open to any, and all criticism and advice. Looking for any corrections in cohesiveness and as well as mechanics. I know the transition between the first body and second is a bit odd, I'd like any advice if known to help the transition.
thanks,
~Wuskin
For almost one hundred years, the Latin words, "Vires, Artes, Mores" have been the guiding philosophy behind Florida State University. Vires signifies strength of all kinds - moral, physical, and intellectual; Artes alludes to the beauty of intellectual pursuits as exemplified in skill, craft, or art; and Mores refers to character, custom, or tradition. Describe how one or more of the values embodied in these concepts are reflected in your life.
Throughout my life, I feel that I have best represented the ideals of Vires, the universal concept of strength. My strengths do not lie strictly in any one area, but in many. I pride myself in my physique, precocity, and position as a principled individual.
Amongst the ranks of my fellow classmates, I stand in line ready for the mile and a half run under the bright Florida sunshine. I can hear the anguish deluge from the slumping mass. As our coach blows the whistle to start, off I go. Left, right, left, right. I follow my preceding foot with each step in such a way that one might expect me to fall off some rigged cliff if I did otherwise. I finish the third of 6 laps; I am halfway there. I look up and notice the few original enthusiasts at a slow walking pace. I continue, spurred on by the lone determination of my own. Only one lap to go, but I find myself at a slow jog feeling shin splints. "Why stop now?" my conscious asks. With no good reason, I endure and push myself towards my limit to help further my physical prowess. Beyond the field, I continue to demonstrate Vires at its finest.
As a senior, I am privileged with several years of study under some of the worlds greatest minds, teachers. With this knowledge, I am able to comprehend ideas as esoteric as the relationship between the four kinematic equations to the most menial; such as the basic facets of everyday life. I commonly find myself in conversations with certain friends about specific words that we like and for what reason; a favorite of mine being the word "deprecate." I find a reasonable correlation between, but not limited to the courses I take and how well I do in them. To sum up last year, I was distinguished as an AP Scholar for successfully passing all three of my exams. At the top of my class, I have been considered for leadership positions based on my intellect. For example, I now lead the Technology Student Association chapter in my school as Vice President. Representing a figure of competence, I not only require being apt but also a sound sense of just.
Raised by a stoic father, I learned the harsh tenderness of tough love. Along with his lessons and the always enduring idea of unconditional forgiveness from my mother, I developed a self-determined perception of what is right and a belief to uphold it. With this in mind, I strive to establish myself as an honest individual. In an attempt to spread my good heartiness, I applied and became a referee for the "largest online destination for competitive gaming," also known as Gamebattles.com. As a referee, I impose the rules and regulations to help direct a better gaming environment for all participants.
Simply put, Vires spells out my daily ventures in a globally understood unity.
thanks,
~Wuskin
For almost one hundred years, the Latin words, "Vires, Artes, Mores" have been the guiding philosophy behind Florida State University. Vires signifies strength of all kinds - moral, physical, and intellectual; Artes alludes to the beauty of intellectual pursuits as exemplified in skill, craft, or art; and Mores refers to character, custom, or tradition. Describe how one or more of the values embodied in these concepts are reflected in your life.
Throughout my life, I feel that I have best represented the ideals of Vires, the universal concept of strength. My strengths do not lie strictly in any one area, but in many. I pride myself in my physique, precocity, and position as a principled individual.
Amongst the ranks of my fellow classmates, I stand in line ready for the mile and a half run under the bright Florida sunshine. I can hear the anguish deluge from the slumping mass. As our coach blows the whistle to start, off I go. Left, right, left, right. I follow my preceding foot with each step in such a way that one might expect me to fall off some rigged cliff if I did otherwise. I finish the third of 6 laps; I am halfway there. I look up and notice the few original enthusiasts at a slow walking pace. I continue, spurred on by the lone determination of my own. Only one lap to go, but I find myself at a slow jog feeling shin splints. "Why stop now?" my conscious asks. With no good reason, I endure and push myself towards my limit to help further my physical prowess. Beyond the field, I continue to demonstrate Vires at its finest.
As a senior, I am privileged with several years of study under some of the worlds greatest minds, teachers. With this knowledge, I am able to comprehend ideas as esoteric as the relationship between the four kinematic equations to the most menial; such as the basic facets of everyday life. I commonly find myself in conversations with certain friends about specific words that we like and for what reason; a favorite of mine being the word "deprecate." I find a reasonable correlation between, but not limited to the courses I take and how well I do in them. To sum up last year, I was distinguished as an AP Scholar for successfully passing all three of my exams. At the top of my class, I have been considered for leadership positions based on my intellect. For example, I now lead the Technology Student Association chapter in my school as Vice President. Representing a figure of competence, I not only require being apt but also a sound sense of just.
Raised by a stoic father, I learned the harsh tenderness of tough love. Along with his lessons and the always enduring idea of unconditional forgiveness from my mother, I developed a self-determined perception of what is right and a belief to uphold it. With this in mind, I strive to establish myself as an honest individual. In an attempt to spread my good heartiness, I applied and became a referee for the "largest online destination for competitive gaming," also known as Gamebattles.com. As a referee, I impose the rules and regulations to help direct a better gaming environment for all participants.
Simply put, Vires spells out my daily ventures in a globally understood unity.
