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"Put on Discovery!" - Why engineering and why Yale engineering essay



Aakash114 5 / 10  
Dec 26, 2010   #1
If you selected one of the engineering majors, please write a brief third essay telling us what has led you to an interest in this field of study, what experiences (if any) you have had in engineering, and what it is about Yale's engineering program that appeals to you.

Please let me know how this sounds. And point out any errors or improvements. Any help will be appreciated.
Deadline approaching -_-


"Faizy, enough is enough. You can't keep watching these useless cartoons the entire day. Put on Discovery! NOW!"

And so my friend my switched to the channel his mom ordered him to. It was an everyday story. Faizan used to love the Power puff girls. Love it. But his mom, being a science enthusiast, loved Discovery. So, losing the everyday battle he turned to Discovery. A familiar song filled the atmosphere.

Mythbusters was on. The frown on Faizan's face was an antipode of the delight on mine. Being more of an athlete than a man of science, he really didn't care about what Adam or Jamie did on the show. I, on the other hand, had grown fond of Mythbusters and a few other Sci-Tech shows his mother used to make us watch. I used to love Adam. His energetic nature combined with his ability to build something out of nothing ignited in me, a love for science and machines, that has just burgeoned ever since.

My most recent attempt at building something that I really wanted to failed miserably. The idea of building an electrostatic levitation chamber using just a thousand rupees in the space of three days for the school science exhibition is what you can call a perfect example of hubris. The days passed by with the speed of light and nothing got done; I realized I was in over my head. Thinking, well, the worst thing that could happen is that I wouldn't win; I found myself relaxing and was surprised to find that the idea that had been eluding me whooshed in with twenty others.

Keen to build something that explained the physics of electrostatics, I decided to build a Van de Graff generator using PVC pipes, several pieces of wire, a motor from a toy car and a soda can. The only thing that I wasn't able to find was a rubber band that would easily fit into the PVC pipes. But then the wrist band lying on the bed-side table caught my eye. With overflowing optimism, I tried it in place of the rubber band and much to my surprise, it worked. The generator finally came to life and suddenly, every bit of effort put in it seemed worthwhile. This experience made me realize that you can come up with a fantastic invention, if you focus on what is and not on what is not.

The knowledge of engineering, however, is not complete unless studied alongside the socio-economic impacts it might have on the society. That's exactly why Yale's engineering program is my ideal choice. Economics and theater are two other fields I have a great interest in and I am sure Yale will provide me with the opportunities to become a pioneer, not only in the world of mechanics but also economics, and maybe even acting. Other than that, the small classrooms and a very low student to faculty ratio guarantee a greater level of collaboration between the students and professors which always reaps fruitful results as engineering is something that just can not be learnt in huge auditoriums with around a hundred students. Being hugely interested in the field of Mechatronics, I long to attend Ast Professor Dollar's lectures and learn more about his exploits in the field of robotics especially about his latest invention that won him the MIT TR35 award. As engineering is all about making designs span out in physical space, SAE and Team Lux will give me an opportunity to do exactly that in a competitive environment. Yale's engineering program will not only provide me with enough research opportunities in the field of engineering but, who knows, it might just help me become an Oscar winning Nobel Laureate.

pquesada90 2 / 4  
Dec 26, 2010   #2
"And so my friend my switched to the channel his mom ordered him to.It was an everyday story. Faizan used to love the Power puff girls. Love it. But his mom, being a science enthusiast, loved Discovery. So, losing the everyday battle he turned to Discovery. A familiar song filled the atmosphere."

"His energetic nature combined with his ability to build something out of nothing ignited in me, a love for science and machines, that has just burgeoned ever since."

"This experience made me realize that you can come up with a fantastic invention, if you focus on what is and not on what is not."

I'm not sure what are you trying to say. Maybe consider changing that phrase.

On overall, good essay. You demonstrate your interest in engineering by showing something you have actually done.
mbanani 8 / 26  
Dec 27, 2010   #3
I love your essay. You've clearly shown how much you like engineering as well as demonstrating knowledge of current innovators. I can easily see your passion for the subject. I also liked how you shown how resourceful you were (wrist band). I like how you ended it. My advice would be to elaborate more on the acting part, as it shows that you're a well rounded student and that you're interest goes beyond engineering (you explained economics properly)

Good job and good luck with your applications


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