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'the more he realized there had to be a God' Newton -historical influence



22kcox 5 / 22  
Jan 1, 2012   #1
Okay this ones a bit risky, i know but please i would really love everyones opinion. be as harsh as you want! I will return the favor.

Propmt: describe influence a historical figure has on you

"Which came first, the chicken or the egg?" The most commonly debated topic. Well, for those who chose to believe in a higher power, that God created the universe and everything in it, then of course the chicken came first. However, for those who claim evolution, would say the egg clearly came before the chicken. A wise man combined his scientific theories and ideas with his faith. This same wise man once said, "This most beautiful system of sun, planets, and comets could only proceed from the counsel and dominion of an intelligent and powerful Being"-his name was Sir Isaac Newton.

Isaac Newton, University of Cambridge scholar, was a renowned mathematician and physicist. On the other side of the spectrum, he was also a famous theologian. A man of faith, the more Newton studied and learned, the more he realized there had to be a God. His faith inspires my own, and gives me the courage to defend my faith as he has his.

Newton is a major historical figure who has influenced me greatly. His ability to combine science with faith encourages me in my own walk with God. We share the unorthodox beliefs in a personal God who consistently is impacting our lives. For me, he is better known as the x factor, the answer for the unknown. Newton gave me hope that scientific theories could be true, while also believing in a higher power. Most would force me to pick a side, while deep down inside me I know there are truths to both.

Isaac Newton's accomplishments and his faith inspire me to strengthen my own. I aspire to be as influential as he has been. Something had to start the evolution in the beginning, how could we have just appeared out of the nothingness of space? Scientifically speaking, the only viable explanation of creation would be a greater being.

ericao2010 12 / 32  
Jan 1, 2012   #2
Hello!

I think your short is essay is really good! I like how you started and the direction you took the rest of the essay. I think the only thing that I would change (or move) are your last two sentences. I think those sentences could be moved to the middle of your essay where you are talking about how Newton influences your life. Or you could leave those sentences there and end your essay in a way that regurgitates why Newton influences you.

I hope this helps!

P.s. I will be making a thread soon about my RA application. I hope you keep to your word! :)


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