"the recollection of our time together" - stanford supplement roomate essay

Q Write a note to your future roomate revealing something about you that will help your roomate and us know you better

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Dear Roommate,
College life is meant to be rife with uncertainties, comprising both hard play and hard work. Through this roller-coaster ride I hope to develop a bond with you that will last a lifetime. So, before we have the time of our lives there are some things about myself I'd like you to know

Diversity is one of the things I value deeply. Like Thodd Rumman I believe that it's the common things that make relationships enjoyable but the different things that make them interesting." A rabid extrovert I am likely to attend as many college events as is physically possible. A fun person I also love trying out new things, meeting new people. Always ready for a laugh I can guarantee you that you'll be doubling up in no time after meeting me. My friends who call me 'crazy' also refer to me as a 'nerd' who is always reading and soaking up information on a vast array of topics.

I delight in small things like baking, writing my journal, photography, and setting out to new places. It is the small things that make life truly wonderful, I believe.

Being my roommate you will never have to worry about room cleanliness as I find the activity nothing short of therapeutic, something that helps me to re-arrange and re-organize my thoughts.

At the end of our tenure of togetherness, I hope we will remain in touch- always smiling at the recollection of our time together.

Ready to begin?

I am a dreamer yet an activist and fun loving yet focused .(COULD YOU suggest a third contrast??) --- instead of contrasting qualities you claim to have, SHOW the reader with contrasting examples.

Do you have examples of actions you take that are paradoxical? It is better to give examples than to make claims. That is why writers say "Show, don't tell."

I believe that there is no end to the adventure we can have and this philosophy of mine never leaves me bored.---- Rather than telling about your philosophy, I think you should use this as an opportunity to discuss your intellectual interests. College is an intellectual occasion, so let's focus on your field of interest, your current activities, and so forth.

This intro is very cool!---> Affectionately known as the "atom bomb", I live up to my reputation.

Still, I think you should replace some of the philosophy with examples of your activities and also examples of your research interests. What do you want to learn about other than your major? What specialization do you want to achieve?

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