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What attribute of your personality are you most proud of, and how has it impacted your life so far? (250 word limit)
Since my early childhood years I have been deeply affected by the misery and sadness of others. I wept when my parents refused to buy a homeless man a meal, stood up against bullying in my class and volunteered as a visiting friend for the retirement home in my town. As a teenager I have sat down and listened to classmates whose parents were getting divorced, friends who were beginning to associate with a bad crowd, and strangers whose eyes were teary. I have shared their despair, their sadness, their frustration and anger, and I have tried my best to help them by providing what emotional support they needed at the time.
In a world that is becoming increasingly noisy and superficial, I listen, I notice, I send the smile, I ask the question, and I do what I can to help. As one who lives a relatively safe and comfortable life, I feel like I have a responsibility act on the compassion I feel for the less fortunate, and by doing so I have been humbled and greatly matured as both a person and a member of society.
Compassion is an emotion that is integral to society. It is a fuel of societal progress and revolutions. Acting on it is a sign of willingness to stand up to injustice, for what you believe in and the will to be a citizen. It is therefore the attribute of my personality I am most proud of.
What attribute of your personality are you most proud of, and how has it impacted your life so far? (250 word limit)
Since my early childhood years I have been deeply affected by the misery and sadness of others. I wept when my parents refused to buy a homeless man a meal, stood up against bullying in my class and volunteered as a visiting friend for the retirement home in my town. As a teenager I have sat down and listened to classmates whose parents were getting divorced, friends who were beginning to associate with a bad crowd, and strangers whose eyes were teary. I have shared their despair, their sadness, their frustration and anger, and I have tried my best to help them by providing what emotional support they needed at the time.
In a world that is becoming increasingly noisy and superficial, I listen, I notice, I send the smile, I ask the question, and I do what I can to help. As one who lives a relatively safe and comfortable life, I feel like I have a responsibility act on the compassion I feel for the less fortunate, and by doing so I have been humbled and greatly matured as both a person and a member of society.
Compassion is an emotion that is integral to society. It is a fuel of societal progress and revolutions. Acting on it is a sign of willingness to stand up to injustice, for what you believe in and the will to be a citizen. It is therefore the attribute of my personality I am most proud of.