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6 hours was the duration that the North Korean family and South Korean family could finally meet for their first time in 60 years and it would be their last time. Tears naturally came out of the eyes of old son and daughter as they bowed to their ailing parents. The South Korean family would try to pack their North Korean families with snacks, clothes, photos, and medications; at least they believe that these could show their apologies and compassions. But 6 hours have passes so fast, and bus drove back to the port and back to North Korea with a ship. The family knew that they will never meet again.
These people are actually lucky to at least check their family's well-beings and their faces. Why? Because North Korea have cancelled the family reunion program that has been funded by the South Korean government. Not only that, South Korea has sent tremendous amount of money, medications, food, and clothes. Kim Jung Ill, a North Korean dictator of more than 50 years, have betrayed the "friendship" that the deceased former South Korean president Kim Dae Jung believed they have made. Suddenly, the Nobel Peace Prize, that president Kim Dae Jung has received, soon became insignificant.
Even permanent reunion of the country is not possible at this time and for long time. Not North Korea, but South Korea is in moral dilemma. Even though it would be the right thing to reunite the history of one country for the first time in 60 years, South Korea does not want to risk their economy in helping the north side. Also, the different society may create upheaval as there could be a very distinguished social class: the rich and the poor. The fact that North Korea has the weapon of mass destruction worries South Korean government, as they are not allowed to hold such a weapon. So what should South Korea do? Just let North Korea do whatever they want because they are stronger than South Korea?
My grandfather signed up for the family reunion in the early 1990's and waited years for his turn. In 2002, he finally got the form which allows him to see limited number of his family members for 6 hours and that would be only once in his life time. But in 2005, the program suddenly was cancelled and year after, my grandfather have passed away without seeing his family in North Korea. Even though he long wanted, my grandfather never got to know where my great-grandparents have been buried and when they were passed away.
I am not being generous, I am asking for the right thing. The family reunion must continue. South Korea and North Korea both would not want the reunite as country right now. But we know that somehow we can allow South Korea and North Korea to meet. So should the program be only 6 hours? No. Are they confined to meeting only once? Absolutely not. We cannot let the time fly. 60 years have been passed since North and South Korea have been separated. The longer the time flies, the more family member would not survive for their reunion-like my grandfather.
A bunch of grammar mistakes. Reread it but with a silent voice so that you can catch the mistakes.
6 hours was the duration that the North Korean family and South Korean family could finally meet for their first time in 60 years and it would be their last time. Tears naturally came out of the eyes of old son and daughter as they bowed to their ailing parents. The South Korean family would try to pack their North Korean families with snacks, clothes, photos, and medications; at least they believe that these could show their apologies and compassions. But 6 hours have passes so fast, and bus drove back to the port and back to North Korea with a ship. The family knew that they will never meet again.
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2. 6 hours was the duration that the North Korean family and South Korean family could finally meet for their first time in 60 years and it would be their last time
For the first and last time in 60 years, a lost family reunion from both North and South Korea took place.
3. Tears naturally came out of the eyes of the matured son and daughter as they bowed to their ailing parents.
4. The gifts were pretty confusing on who was the reciever.
kinda got to go, but i will keep editing as i have more time kk?
