Ryerson Journalism Admission Essay- "The Loss of Writing"

Requirements: Tell us in approximately 300 words how a specific work of journalism (not your own) had an impact on your desire to study journalism. It can be from newspapers, magazines, broadcast or online news sources.

A Loss of Writing

Technology has gifted our society with many previously unattainable pleasures and conveniences, but one must question whether or not it is now oversterpping its appropiate boundries. Services are gradually becoming more automated, negating the need for human labor. Now, technology is reaching another frontier in a formerly unthinkable way- journalism.

The article "Is Software Set to Replace Sports Journalists?" speaks of an amazing piece of futuristic technology: a program that can write convincing, full length sports game summaries. The shock of this moved me- how could a machine possibly do this, with writing so firmly entrenched in the emotions only humans can feel? Somehow, technology found a way, and shows the potential to take control of a transforming journalism industry even more than it has through the advent of the internet.

This article inspired me to study journalism- to stop this injustice. Man cannot be robbed of his pen as much as he cannot be robbed of his soul. The desire to show the world the power of human writing, how it can never be replaced by technology, drove me to seek out journalism. Through articles I will write, through the strength of my work, I want to show that writing will forever belong to human. That machine can never write with the force that a human can. Due to their limiations, and in humankind's best interests, machines should only assist us, not replace us as it threatents to do.

Thus, I find myself on the road to journalism, a study becoming further entrenched in the bowels of machines. The knowledge this article gave me created a new passion in journalistic writing, and for halting the advance of technology into it as machines attempt to enroach upon my domain.

At the end of that first paragraph, before the word journalism, I think you should change the dash to a colon.

Capitalized the word Internet.

You should look at all paragraphs in this essay and ask yourself what the main theme is. To have journalism be the main theme is too simplistic. How about adding detail like this:

Now, technology is reaching another frontier in a formerly unthinkable way: Journalism is becoming ___________________. (make a concise statement about the meaning you are trying to express. Then, end the paragraph. )

And one more idea:
Man cannot be robbed of his pen any more than he cannot be robbed of his soul.