yisha 6 / 33 8 Dec 6, 2012 #1Please briefly elaborate on one of your extracurricular activities or work experiences in the space below (1000 character maximum)Hope you can point out the grammar mistakes and anywhere awkward.And did I state my experience clearly? Enough Details? Did I explain how the experience promoted me?I was a DJ in the school broadcasting station hosting the programme about the new discoveries in science and technology field.The lunch hour when I shared the latest discoveries with the whole school was really an exciting moment.Moreover,I broadcast in many school activities such as the school sport meeting and the swimming games.As an officer of the school broadcasting station,I also participatezd in organizing the school singing contest.Although I met many unexpected difficulties when arranging the show list and the venue,these barriers did not stop me from organizing an amazing contest,and even made me stronger.The broadcasting work shaped me an outgoing and confident girl.Most importantly,the painstaking endeavors cultivated my capabilities not only in broadcasting but also in the leadership and organizing ability.Now I have new DJs take over the programme,but the memory as a DJ will inspire me to promote and challenge myself for my whole life.
dumi 1 / 6,925 1592 Dec 6, 2012 #2I was a DJ in the school broadcasting station hosting the programme about the new discoveries in science and technology field.The lunch hour when I shared the latest discoveries with the whole school was really an exciting momentI guess you can combine these two ideas and come up with a more catchy opening statement ; )I remember the exciting lunch hours during which I shared latest discoveries in science and technology with the whole school as a DJ in the school broadcasting station.Moreover,I broadcast in many school activities such as the school sport meeting and the swimming games.As an officer of the school broadcasting station,I also participatezd in organizing the school singing contestMy programmes also were extended to cover sports events. I also took a lead role in organizing the school singing contest which was organized by the shcool broadcasting station.
yara 3 / 4 Dec 8, 2012 #4"I also participatezd"it's spelt participated, I like it but I think you should elaborate more, they have given you 1000 words space, just my opinion.good luck!
OP yisha 6 / 33 8 Dec 9, 2012 #5Actually I only got 1000 characters rather than 1000 words to explain my exracurricular activies.I will elaborate more as you suggest.Thank you !
weeyizhi / Dec 22, 2012 #6Thanks for helping me. I hope I'm not too late for this.I was a DJ in the school broadcasting station, hosting the programme (in US english it's spelled as program) about the new discoveries in science and technology field .The lunch hour when I shared the latest discoveries with the whole school was really an exciting moment. (this would be a good place to elaborate what you did and why you felt excited) Moreover,I broadcast in many school activities such as the school sports meeting and the swimming gamescompetitions . As an officer of the school broadcasting station,I also participated in organizing the school singing contest. Although I met many unexpected difficulties when arranging the show list and the venue,these barriers did not stop me from organizing an amazing contest,and even made me stronger. (how has it made you stronger?) The broadcasting work shaped me into an outgoing and confident girl. Most importantly, the painstaking endeavors cultivated my capabilities not only in broadcasting but also in the leadership and organizing ability. (show us. don't just tell) Now, I have new DJs take over the programme program ,but the memory as a DJ will inspire me to promote and challenge myself for my whole life.I'm aware that you will not have enough space to do all the things I pointed. Therefore, I recommend you to cut off some parts you think is not that important. Then, focus on the most important thing you did and show (don't tell) us how it changed you into a person with leadership/courage/organizing activity/strength, etc. Also, remember to space after every period and comma!Good luck with your application! =)
