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School Leaving Certificate / studies at COA



iamhelpless 4 / 7  
Feb 15, 2012   #1
Please check for grammatical mistakes, sentense structures and please comment on the construction of ideas and essay strength. thank you. URGENT!!!

Is your past academic record an accurate reflection of your ability and potential? Please elaborate on your answer.

I passed my School Leaving Certificate with all A's and Distinction. In high school, I gave more time to extra-curricular activities, clubs, composing songs and teaching but spent less time concentrating on coursework, thus, graduated with a High School GPA of only 3.72 while all the teachers had forecasted my grades as A*'s to Cambridge. Now that I think back, I showcased my ability to perform academically good with only classroom activities and lectures. However, I believe that I did not perform not even close to my utmost ability.

How do you envision your studies at COA fitting in with your overall educational and career goals?

Realization that I come from the third poorest country in the world has never been enough for me. In my own odd ways, I have always tried to bring about small changes in this place but my impacts have only lied in the small corners of the city I live in. My dream to alleviate energy crisis from Nepal made me follow the path to COA which has strong promising systems to inducing leadership and intellectuality in each student enabling them to take up challenges and never back down, become a global citizen, gain practical knowledge and expertise in any field.

How did you first learn about College of the Atlantic?
During my week-long research on US colleges and universities at United States Education Foundation-Kathmandu, I found College of the Atlantic.

Jennyflower81 - / 674  
Feb 15, 2012   #2
Hi :)
I can make a few suggestions:

Now that I think back, I showcased my ability to perform academically good with onlyduring classroom activities and lectures. However, I believe that I did not perform not even close to my utmost ability.

When you say " I did not perform not even close to my utmost ability." it makes me sense negativity, Can you turn this into a more positive statement? Explain more clearly how the extracurricular activities detracted from your studies, and mention that you learned a lesson-- the lesson being that you must prioritize education and time management. Be sure to sound enthusiastic about your many activities, because that was the reason you took on so many things- you obviously have a great passion for life.

The r ealization that I come from the third poorest country in the world has never been enough for mehas (add in an emotion here- how does it make you feel to be from this culture?). In my own odd ways, I have always tried to bring about small changes in this place, but my impact has only lied inaffected the small corners of themy city I live in. My dream is to alleviate the energy crisis. Being from Nepal made me follow the path to COA, which has strong promising systems (programs?)tothatinduce leadership and intellectuality in each student.This allowsenabling them to take up challenges and never back down, become a global citizen, gain practical knowledge, and excel in any field.

Can you be more specific about the "changes and impact" you have had on your community- even something small... like complementing a stranger, or picking up litter, or donating to the salvation army


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