Science is a wonderful and amazing subject that helps us to explain the world. My favorite class

khonglong 1 / 2

Mar 15, 2015 #1

Short essay
What is your favorite class? Why?

My favorite class is science because I like doing the experiment, learning something new after each labs.

Science is a wonderful and amazing subject that helps us to explain the world. Imagine yourself flying in a plane. How could you breathe when there is so little air pressure? How can I watch TV up there? All of these question can be answered by using the knowledge from science. From learning science, I can get many experience and knowledge. When my teacher got me to work on germination, I was super excited.On lab, one reaction can create another reaction.

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Ashley_W 2 / 2

Mar 15, 2015 #2

I suggest that you use some linking words to make your essay more logical and more organized. Like, first, second, last... As for ..., when it comes to ...

OP khonglong 1 / 2

Mar 15, 2015 #3

i am ESL student, i need more help!!! please!!! i don't know how to integrated n my essay

Niddumakhi 2 / 5

Mar 16, 2015 #4

Hi Khonglong

This is my opinion for your writing
1. it will be better if you separete your body paragraph to become some paragraphs, sometimes I use this method for my essay:
- introduction (hook, general statement, my argue),
- body 1,
- body 2,
- body 3, and
- conclution (rewrite thesis, conclution, and my suggestion).
2. overall, your subject and verb agreement are good (top)
3. it will be better if you use constant tenses in your paragraph

Introduction

(put introduction such as there are many kind of class). (general explanation) Some people say...., (your opinion) my favorite class is science because I like doing the experiment, learning something new after each labs.

Bodies

Science is a wonderful and amazing subject that helps us to explain the world. Imagine yourself flying in a plane. How could you breathe when there is so little air pressure? How can I watch TV up there? All of these question can be answered by using the knowledge from science. From learning science, I can get many experience and knowledge. For example,When my teacher got me to work on germination, I was super excited.On lab, one reaction can create another reaction. If the people who were doing the experiment are not careful, they might get the wrong reaction and repeating it again.

[I think, it will be better if you write this in new paragraph] Therefore, to be successful in science class, we are not only able to handle the broad knowledge but also be careful in every single aspect and know how to apply them in the real world. Science is an interesting subject ,developing my patience and diligence, and gained valuable experience when doing lad and project. Science is also used to find cures and treatment for people who are suffering illness . Doctors and nurses use their scientific knowledge to explain the course of treatment to patients and applying them in their treatment.

[I think, it will be better if you write this in new paragraph] Sciences are needed and used in many different fields today. Science has always interested me because of the never ending knowledge. There is always something new to learn and study about.Science very exciting, interesting and fun,it help me to answer and explain specifically many different questions and wondering that exist in real life by what I learned from science, understanding deeper in the new science concept.

Conclution

To conclude,As almost everything in life, science always expands. The application of science in the real life, the never-end knowledge and my own curiosity to explain the new concepts are the reasons why science is my favorite class. So I suggest others to ... (i put my suggestion)

thats all my opinion, also give me some correction if you have other opinions
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lynzee22 - / 87

Mar 17, 2015 #5

My favorite class is science because I like doing the experiment, learning something new after each labs .

All of these questions can be answered by using the knowledge from science.

~~From learning~~By studying science, I can get ~~many~~ experience and knowledge.

OnIn lab, one reaction can create another reaction.

If the people who were doing the experiment are not careful, they might get the wrong reaction and repeat~~ing~~ it again.

Science is an interesting subject ~~,developing my patience and diligence, and gained valuable experience when doing lad and project.~~It helps develop my patience and diligence and teaches me valuable experiences while in lab and doing projects.

Please be careful with grammar and word choice. There are simple errors in your writing that can be fixed by a careful read through.
Also, stay on topic. The prompt is WHY is this your favorite class. You explain WHAT science is. Not WHY you like it. You talk about why at the very end. You need to say why from the beginning. Use specific examples of why you like science, and then use the words, I like it because.... It facinates me becasue... or something like that

OP khonglong 1 / 2

Mar 18, 2015 #6

This is my correction!!!! Please !! help me!
Short essay: What is your favorite class? Why?

During a period of school, any of us was learned and have a lot of favorite subject such as Math, English, Physics, and Science ... All subject were brought to us many interesting things in life, taught we how to be good, make us smile and have fun. For me, Science is my best favorite subject because I am a naughty child, I always quite adventurous and sought new experiences. I was always ready to accept the outcome of all my adventures are them good or bad. From the good experiences I earned a deeper understanding and exposure while the bad ones provided me with important lessons for life. and like to observe natural phenomena, do experiment, and learn something new after each lab.

Science is a wonderful and amazing subject that helps me to explain the problem. How could you breathe when there is so little air pressure? How can I watch TV up there? All of these questions can be answered by using the knowledge from science.

From learning science, I can get many experiences and knowledge. For example, when my teacher asked me to work on germination, I was super excited. In lab, one reaction can create another reaction. If people who were doing the experiment are not careful, they might get the wrong reaction and repeat it again. Science is an interesting subject, it helps develop my patience and diligence and teaches valuable experience while doing lab and doing project. . .

Therefore, to be successful in science class, we are not only able to handle the broad knowledge but also be careful in every single aspect and know how to apply them in the real world. Sciences are needed and used in many different fields today, it used to find cures and treatment for people who are suffering illness. It also is very important to my career in future is working on medical field like doctors and nurses use their scientific knowledge to explain the course of treatment to patients and applying them in their treatment. I hope my dream can become truth.

As almost everything in life, science always expands. The application of science in the real life, the never-end knowledge and my own curiosity to explain the new concepts are the reasons why science is my favorite class. Science has always interesting for me because it never ending knowledge. There is always something new to learn and study about. Science is very exciting, interesting and fun, it help me to answer and explain specifically many different questions and wondering that exist in real life by what I learned from science, understanding deeper in the new science concept.