This essay is also for Southern Virginia University (a Mormon school).
My question is should I use a little snippet of my elementary school days in this type of essay? Or should I write about a different challenge in my life?
Also, please help me edit and give me suggestions.
Topic: Describe in 200 words or less a significant challenge that you have overcome and its impact on you.
I sit on my desk, trying to figure out how to set up a word problem. My brain is experiencing a thunderstorm and my brain cells are crying for help. I want to ask for help, but I don't want people to think that I'm not bright when it comes to math. My teachers literally believed that I'm not able to succeed because I'm not like the other students. But one day before entering freshman year, I said to myself that I have to prove the teachers and myself that I got what it takes to be a hard-working student. Yet, with every success comes with a secret: Words. No matter how positive or negative the words may be, I use the power of it to motivate myself to strive my way to success. Positive words are easy to deal with however with the negative words, I have to fight my way through it.
Ok, it's not really done but I felt like I should change the way how I discuss my challenge or is it alright the way it is?
My question is should I use a little snippet of my elementary school days in this type of essay? Or should I write about a different challenge in my life?
Also, please help me edit and give me suggestions.
Topic: Describe in 200 words or less a significant challenge that you have overcome and its impact on you.
I sit on my desk, trying to figure out how to set up a word problem. My brain is experiencing a thunderstorm and my brain cells are crying for help. I want to ask for help, but I don't want people to think that I'm not bright when it comes to math. My teachers literally believed that I'm not able to succeed because I'm not like the other students. But one day before entering freshman year, I said to myself that I have to prove the teachers and myself that I got what it takes to be a hard-working student. Yet, with every success comes with a secret: Words. No matter how positive or negative the words may be, I use the power of it to motivate myself to strive my way to success. Positive words are easy to deal with however with the negative words, I have to fight my way through it.
Ok, it's not really done but I felt like I should change the way how I discuss my challenge or is it alright the way it is?