Skidmore's supplemental essay: Passion for Skidmore's International...

Prompt: In brief, why do you feel that Skidmore is a good match for your academic and personal goals? (700 characters)

Well tell me if it works well. This college is one of my top choices and definitely want to make a good impression. *I am applying ED for this college.

Because Skidmore is the next stop in my life road map. Skidmore appeals to me not only because of the brilliant faculty who would teach me there but also because it will allow my curious mind to explore new horizons in this wild world full of independent minds. Because I will have the opportunity to discuss "Don Quixote" by Miguel de Cervantes Saavedra with Professor Burton and learn about "Plato's Dialectical Method" from Professor Gonzalez. With the help of Skidmore's community I will not only learn a great variety of languages and cultures, but also experiment these cultures through the International Affairs' study abroad programs. I desire to learn and work as fast and effectively as a Thoroughbred!

Great work! You used the 700 characters very well!
Clever and great idea, by including the specific professors names.
Def. an impressive detail.

Good luck!

Thanks guys.
What do you think about this:
In brief, why do you feel that Skidmore is a good match for your academic and personal goals?

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Skidmore is the next stop in my life road map. Skidmore is a good match for me not only because of the brilliant teaching faculty who will mentor me through my college life and beyond but also because it will allow my curious mind to explore new horizons in this diverse world full of complex minds. I vicariously dream of discussing "Don Quixote" by Miguel de Cervantes Saavedra with Professor Burton and learn about "Plato's Dialectical Method" from Professor Gonzalez. I am eager to discover new languages and cultures through the International Affairs' study abroad programs to develop and transform myself to become a multi-cultural student, doer. Thus, I am willing to learn and work as fast and effectively as a Thoroughbred!

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As a new student at Skidmore, I will not conform myself with only attending the beautiful campus. I will not only feel proud to answer questions about where do I attend college to people while walking on the fifth street at NYC on a Sunday's evening. No. I will answer proudly to these people that I am part of the varsity soccer team at Skidmore and that I am a Thoroughbred. I will enjoy saying that I am part of the school's band and that I play my guitar as a soloist opening school's concerts because I found in Skidmore more inspiration to fulfill my musical talents. I will let them with an opened mouth when I tell them that in Skidmore I am part of Phi Sigma Iota and SOAR clubs and in those, I will say, I learn in daily basis about my passion-cultures. I know Skidmore and I will be one and that I will offer this community my time and effort to contribute to it as much as it will contribute me. I am eager to study and learn at Skidmore, but I am more eager to use this knowledge and do, act.

I agree with Rabia. In fact you do not need to use I believe. It sounds pretty good without that.

However you still have something more to consider.
teaching faculty who I will find in class

I do not understand that you are expecting to find teachers only in class. This is a redundancy. Pls avoid it

I rewrote them a little bit:

Tell me if these sound better. =)

Ya they of course sound better. I can say you have improved your chance of acceptance.