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Stanford "Intellectual Vitality" Essay about Dementia



spak417 2 / 6  
Dec 27, 2009   #1
"Stanford students are widely know to posses a sense of intellectual vitality. Tell us about an idea or experience you have had that you find intellectually engaging."

I stared keenly into my grandmother's age-wearied eyes, puzzled by the uncommon sense of unfamiliarity I found within her hazel gaze. She feigned a smile to veil her confusion - no, her insecurity. "It's your grandson Spencer!" I loudly vocalized to ensure that I was audible. Instantly, her nearly toothless grin became genuine and the fog clouding her memory dissipated. Recognition had set it in. My grandmother was still in there; I only had to search harder to overcome the gripping effects of Dementia.

At the site of my grandmother's familiar face, I'm instantly reminded of my childhood. I fondly reminisce about visiting her house each day after elementary school and rummaging through a chestnut wicker basket stocked with an assortment of wooden blocks and arches and brass knick-knacks. I'm reminded of the war-worthy fortresses, modern skyscrapers, and grandiose palaces I constructed from the apparent pieces of junk. These are memories that I cherish - memories that I know she can't recall, memories Dementia has stolen from her.

As I look into her eyes, I wonder what she is thinking or trying to think. I consider how she must feel to be the pawn of her own mind at times, eliciting little control over voluntary thought. To be eroded by the natural, uncontrollable ebb and flow of her memories? What causes her brain to slowly shrink, tainting her memory? Dementia's clutch on the brain is truly surreal. It's my grandmother's irrepressible time-machine, transplanting her instantly from her carefree days as a teenager to her plight in today's harsh reality. I'm fearful of my grandmother's disease. Fearful of losing control. Fearful of losing her. Then, she smiles again and I'm reminded that she's not completely gone.

Thanks for reading my essay. I'm unsure if it shows intellectual vitality or if it is just too personal for this prompt

tkkt1 11 / 47  
Dec 27, 2009   #2
I stared keenly into my grandmother's age-wearied eyes, puzzled by the uncommon sense of unfamiliarity I found within her hazel gaze.

---Who or what was puzzled?

The second paragraph just takes up space and does not say much. I think you can elaborate more on talking about how your grandmother's illness is intriguing- the logistics of it. You only touch on answering the prompt. Good luck!

Return the favor and read my essay please:
Foreigner 3 / 10  
Dec 28, 2009   #3
As I look into her eyes, I wonder what she is thinking or trying to think. How must she feel to be the pawn of her own mind? To elicit little control over voluntary thought? To be eroded by the natural, uncontrollable ebb and flow of her memories? To be tormented by confusion? What causes her brain to slowly shrink? What taints her memory? Why her? I'm fearful of these thoughts. Fearful of losing control. Fearful of my grandmother's plight. Then, she smiles again and I'm reminded that she's not completely gone.

Try to cut a few questions and reduce it to 2 or 3 really important ones. I like the end a lot.
OP spak417 2 / 6  
Dec 30, 2009   #4
Here are some corrections. I didn't remove the second paragraph just because I believe it ties it to the disease and the loss of memory


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