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Personal Statement - Transition to the Interior Design of University of Cincinnati

nguye4t6 1 / 1  
Feb 28, 2019   #1

Briefly explain why you would like to enroll in the College of Design, Architecture, Art and Planning

I love traveling. When I travel, not only do I get to experience the different cultures, but I also admire the distinct architectures each country and city holds. Since I was little, I have always wondered why things are the way they are. For example, why do houses in Vietnam normally have multiple stories, while in San Diego, they usually have one story? Why don't many Koreans have beds or dining chairs but they eat and sleep on the floor instead? All of these are designs with purposes behind them. Houses in Vietnam have more than one story because Vietnam is a small country with a high population. Building multiple-story houses reduces the ground space needed while maintaining enough area for normal daily activities. The fact that Koreans have a floor oriented culture is because instead of air heaters, Koreans use heated floors to stay warm in the winter. How much thought was put into the design processes to harmonize the cultural characteristics, economic, societal, religious values, and the environmental challenges never fails to astonish me. It is the mission of designers to create functional, convenient, and inspiring living/working space while keeping them aesthetically pleasing, and suited to the customer lifestyle. I find such mission to be very intellectually satisfying.

The huge impact that design has on our life is another reason why I found my passion for Interior Design. One irrational design can taint the whole living experience. For instance, one time I went to a friend's house for a cooking night, I noticed that it was very hard to see the food color to know whether it was cooked. Immediately, I realized the light on the ceiling was oddly placed which provided very poor lighting to the stove area. After that experience, I took it upon myself to become proficient in Interior Design and use what I learned to design spaces that promise to provide customers with the fullest living experience. I acknowledge the importance of problem-solving when it comes to interior designing. In the first semester at the University of Cincinnati, I got involved in the Design for America organization, where I got to learn about the design process and problem-solving. I had the opportunity to practice and apply my creativity and designing skills to help create impacts in the local community. When I was in high school, I was in the top 10% of over 2,000 students in the National Drawing Examination. The examination was not about drawing the best picture but was using the tools that I was taught to express myself in the form of art. Line weight, color, texture, and perspective were all considered. I believe understanding art and having the creative capabilities of producing art are important skills necessary in becoming an interior designer. Furthermore, having been a team leader in Girl Scouts, I understand how important is leadership to a vast community like university campus.

The more I look into it, the more eager I am to pursue my education in Interior Design. The idea of being able to improve one's life with my design is so compelling to me that I know for a fact this is what I want to do. This is my life's dream, and I have what it takes to earn it. As is well established, UC has one of the best Interior Design programs. Participation in such a well-established program would allow me to explore every potential of surrounding spaces in enhancing human's life. I have only scratched the surface of this truly captivating and evolving subject, and I believe UC is the best choice for me to keep nurturing my love for Interior Design. Additionally, in attending UC's Interior Design program, I will contribute my leadership skills and passionate mind to the campus community. By pursuing a degree from UC, I will have a good foundation to move ahead on my path of becoming an interior designer and to fulfill my passion while developing my philosophy of design.
Holt  Educational Consultant - / 14,648 4752  
Feb 28, 2019   #2
Thuy, the first paragraph is out of place in the presentation. You cannot claim "childhood" for this type of essay because a child does not have any analytical ability that could be considered a clear indication of your potential as an interior designer. You are over reaching. That paragraph is also coming across like a research paper because you describe too many country specific interior designs. Which have nothing to do with your "childhood" claim. Don't use that paragraph. Use the second paragraph to kick off your essay instead. That shows an adult mindset that uses a general reference to design, which is what you will be learning more about at the university.

Separate the discussion about why you chose to transition to Interior Design. First discuss what drew you to your original course major then what occurred that made you decide to change courses. What was it about the courses in interior design at this university that told you this was the right decision to make? What factors influenced this choice? Right now, the section relating to this is not really clear in this essay. All the other discussion points you have are irrelevant to the actual prompt. Remove all discussions that do not relate to your decision to transfer to this new major. Create an essay that mostly discusses your previous major in relation to the shift and how the university offerings differ which is why you decided to change universities and courses. Your last paragraph can remain as is, where is. No need to change it. It allows the essay to close on a strong note.
OP nguye4t6 1 / 1  
Feb 28, 2019   #3
@Holt Thank you so much for your advice

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