IntlIndian /
Nov 23, 2009 #1
Hey,
I just wrote one part of my Smith Supplement, and I would really appreciate it is someone would read it and help correct grammatical errors and/or improve it and critique it in any way.
Please feel free to tell me that it's a horrible answer and I should re-do it :)
Thankyou so much
Here it is-
When Smith College was founded in 1871, there were few educational opportunities for women. Is a women's college still relevant in 2009? (Limit response to 150 words)
Although times have changed, stereotypes about women still exist. Especially in developing countries, like India, women's career goals are often undermined and they are expected to pay more attention to domestic life. These restrictions often cause a lack of confidence in women, to stand up for what they truly desire. I feel that a women's college will help women gain more confidence and a broader perspective of life, allowing them to graduate as strong, independent role models and leaders in their own right. Since they are given an opportunity to excel without worrying about 'the superiority of men,' they are more likely to emerge with a better overall educational experience. Even with increasing opportunities now being given to women, the trend of Smith women emerging more confident and powerful than women from coeducational universities has convinced me that women's colleges are still relevant.
I just wrote one part of my Smith Supplement, and I would really appreciate it is someone would read it and help correct grammatical errors and/or improve it and critique it in any way.
Please feel free to tell me that it's a horrible answer and I should re-do it :)
Thankyou so much
Here it is-
When Smith College was founded in 1871, there were few educational opportunities for women. Is a women's college still relevant in 2009? (Limit response to 150 words)
Although times have changed, stereotypes about women still exist. Especially in developing countries, like India, women's career goals are often undermined and they are expected to pay more attention to domestic life. These restrictions often cause a lack of confidence in women, to stand up for what they truly desire. I feel that a women's college will help women gain more confidence and a broader perspective of life, allowing them to graduate as strong, independent role models and leaders in their own right. Since they are given an opportunity to excel without worrying about 'the superiority of men,' they are more likely to emerge with a better overall educational experience. Even with increasing opportunities now being given to women, the trend of Smith women emerging more confident and powerful than women from coeducational universities has convinced me that women's colleges are still relevant.
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