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Subject combination/ professors/Swimming coach ; Why Rochester?/Meliora experience


holmes01234 4 / 12 1  
Jan 1, 2013   #1
Why Rochester? - The University of Rochester is one of two universities listed by The Carnegie Foundation for the Advancement of Teaching as arts-and-science focused, medium-sized, and highly residential, with comprehensive PhD programs, medical schools, and very high research activity. Both offer undergraduates an unusual degree of freedom in their curriculum. Which of these characteristics (or others) are leading you to apply to Rochester?

I am drawn to Rochester because this school offers what no other school does. My love for music, math, and science has made me try to find ways to somehow combine them in my career. Amidst my research I came across an article in which students and professors at Rochester developed a computer program that allowed a computer to 'learn' an instrument. It fascinated me that after recording a clarinet player, the computer could play out the sounds of that particular instrument - with perfect note precision, dynamics, and even emotion. After reading this article, I knew there had to be more amazing opportunities for me at Rochester. With more research I discovered Rochester's new audio & music engineering major, a major that combines engineering and music for students that have a passion for both. This is why I want to go to Rochester - if I am accepted, I would be able to participate in this amazing opportunity that I would not get anywhere else.

Meliora: ''Ever better'' - The University's motto directs our focus toward continual improvement through learning, discovery, creativity, and enterprising collaborations among people with different points of view. Describe a ''Meliora'' experience from your life.

"Let go of me," I begged the bawling seven year old that clung onto my hair for dear life. "No!" She screamed right into my ears. "But your feet can touch the bottom here!" I argued back, only to be buried in the kid's wailing. This was how my swim lessons usually started. Most kids were terrified at even the mention of water, and getting them off their paranoid mothers - or me- proved a demanding task. However, I was not alone. My boss, who is an instructor himself, was in every step of the way to help me. He taught me how to hold the kids so they feel safe. He told me what to say to the kids to encourage them and make them laugh. It was a difficult process, and I worked very hard. At the end, it was more than worth it. Watching those kids finally swim by themselves, knowing that I had created in them confidence and the love for water, I was overcome with satisfaction and happiness. Working as a water safety instructor has helped me become patient and encouraging. It has taught me to be understanding, as I imagined myself in the kids' shoes and realized that I, too, would have been terrified. Being a swimming teacher has proven to be an indispensable experience that shaped who I am today.

The second one is too long, I need to cut about 200 characters. What do you guys think??

ethannov 2 / 12 3  
Jan 1, 2013   #3
I am drawn to Rochester because this school offers what no other school does. My love for music, math, and science has made me try to find ways to somehow combine them in my career. Amidst my research I came across an article in which students and professors at Rochester developed a computer program that allowed a computer to 'learn' an instrument.

Your first paragraph does fine without that sentence because you state it at the bottom. In my opinion, starting with your passion makes the intro a little stronger.

My love for music, math, and science has made compels me find a college that can transform my passions into a career.

Again just my opinion.

If you could take a look at my UVA supplement (take two) it would be greatly appreciated!
essa07 1 / 2  
Jan 1, 2013   #4
The essay is good.. U have to cut 'I am drawn to Rochester because this school offers what no other school does' this line as u r repeating this here: This is why I want to go to Rochester.


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