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'I successfully founded an electronics club' - MIT creativity essay



mrgzg1 6 / 14  
Dec 14, 2009   #1
Tell us about a time you used your creativity. This could be something you made, a project that you led, an idea that you came up with, or pretty much anything else.

When I was in boarding school my interests in Science grew further. There I encountered one of the best physics teachers, Mr. Raghavan. Through his support I successfully founded an electronics club. Due to the excellent knowledge gained in electronics club, my life and encouragement from my dad, I took initiative to take part in school's science fair. I decided to make a small solar car.First I made a blue print, though when I designed it on paper it was very aerodynamic, but when it came to reality it was not that good looking. As there were only flat photovoltaic plates available in the market I decided to make the car in shape of house roof. When I was done collecting materials, I constructed chassis from pop sticks because their light weight was perfect for construction. In the chassis I planted a motor along with designed axle which rotated with least friction. At that time I was so desperate about testing my car that I went to the extent of using bulb to impart solar energy to the car at night. It didn't run with the energy bulb, I thought it might be able to run in the morning when the sun will shower its light on the panel, but it didn't happen. It turned out that the panels were not creating enough current to drive my car. I went to consult Mr. Raghavan and he suggested that I should out the panels in parallel circuit, instead of connecting them in series, he also gave me low speed high torque motor. The tweaked version of my car actually worked though sometimes I had to give a push to start. I did not abandon researching about solar cars after the fair was over. I get most knowledge from the solar car models that participate in World Solar Challenge. In future I look forward to join MIT's Solar Electric Vehicle Team and contribute to make alternative energy vehicle.

Princess Daisy 1 / 9  
Dec 15, 2009   #2
When I was in boarding school my interests in Science grew further. There I encountered one of the best physics teachers, Mr.Raghavan. Through his support I was successfully able to startfounded an electronics club. Due to theThrough excellent knowledge I gained in the electronics club and also from life till then, I decided to take part in a Science Fair. It was the first time that I was going to make a model for display rather than just for fun, but yet I considered it as another model that I would had mademake for fun. I decided to make a small solar car and with full support from Mr.Raghavan and my parents from home I started the project. First I designed it on a paper. Though it lookedwhen I designed it on paper it was very aerodynamic friendly when I drew it , but when it came to reality, it wasn't that good. As there were only flat photovoltaic plates available in the market, I decided to make the car in the shape of house roof. When I was done collecting materials, I constructed chassis from pop sticks because their light weight was perfect for construction. In the chassis I also planted a motor along with sweetlyI am not sure about this word designed axle which rotated with least friction. It was about 8pm when I completed the car's electric circuit and the car was ready for testing . At that time I was so desperate about testing my car that I went to the extent of using a bulb to impart solar energy to the car. When it didn't run with the energy bulb, I thought it might be able to run in the morning when the sun will shower its enormous solar energy on the car, but itthat didn't happen either . It turned out that the panels were not creating enough current to drive my car. I went to consult Mr.Raghavan and he suggested that I should out the panels in parallel circuit,

I like your story Manan, but it seems you are not done yet :P I would love to hear the ending :) Good luck!
OP mrgzg1 6 / 14  
Dec 15, 2009   #3
I am jealous of you because you know so good english... personally being brought up in a non english environment I never had chance to converse or write intensly in english... even most of the books at my local library are in Gujarati... anyway I am thankful that you are helping me correct my essays and helping me express my best ideas!
yang 2 / 278  
Dec 15, 2009   #4
When I was in boarding school my interests in Science grew further.

My interest in sciences (which ones? chem? physics?) when I was in boarding school.
try to make this first sentence a bit more "creative"? we'll see...

There I encountered one of the best physics teachers, Mr. Raghavan.

I encountered one of the best physics teachers I have known (i'm sure that your statements will make the MIT rep grin lol) there, Mr. Raghavan

...

there r some mistakes, but understandable coming from a person in India.
I'm not really a big editing fan, so I'll just comment on the ideas.

though when I designed it on paper it was very aerodynamic, but when it came to reality it was not that good looking.

it seems that this sentence describes the problem. Is that all? not good looking? I'm pretty sure that you also wanted to talk about the shape of the solar cells, so do it here!

1 HUGE and 1 minor problems.

How does your essay answer the prompt? It asks for something creative, but it seems that you got all your info either from your physics teacher, or from the World Solar Challenge...which shows your abilities to research and stuff, but not creative.

This is creativity: you have a problem, you try to find ways to solve it, and DING! you've got it! Use a clever way to solve the problem

But it has to be YOU, not your physics teacher. Try to take credit of the project.

the minor problem. As you mentioned, there's a world solar challenge, which means that the project you're doing isn't very original, which kinda defeat the purpose. Also, I've seen many writings on the SAME project. I personally wrote a statement about solar panels and this project (not car) i did on it. Therefore, either come up with something REVOLUTIONARY, or give up the topic...it's too common.


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