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'a swirling storm' - UChicago Short Response Question 1



jfrancishutch 2 / 7  
Dec 11, 2011   #1
Hey so I sent in my application to UChicago, and this was my essay. Any thoughts guys? It's different for sure, but so am I. Thanks!

Question 1. How does the University of Chicago, as you know it now, satisfy your desire for a particular kind of learning, community, and future? Please address with some specificity your own wishes and how they relate to UChicago.

My mind is a moving maelström, or a swirling storm, to say the least. To put into words, it is like a strange ride on a subway train late at night not knowing where to go, eating Tuvaluan trout with chips and salsa, and a constant, synced dance to a rhythmic rhapsody without a metronome. A trove of puzzling perplexities and random, often times, useless information, my mind is weird, unorthodox, and zany, yet I could not venture to imagine what life would be like if it were different. I would probably think more highly of people who cannot tie bow-ties, despite the fact that every man should know how to fold one of these suave fastenings, but I digress.

Perhaps this thought process, piqued with intrigue and yearning to just simply know about "stuff," like why is lemon juice made with artificial flavors, yet dishwashing liquid is made with real lemons or why women cannot put on mascara with their mouth closed, would help me to decide on a major of study at university. Contrary, it jerks my judgement from left to right, up to down, A to Z (pronounced /ˈzɛd/), or any other term alpha-directional combination conceivable. To add that my mind is like a tongue, lost without a compass in a tempest, waiting to be guided and to taste everything out there would also be appropriate to its description. The structure of the Core curriculum at UChicago and its instruction is what such a gourmand mind at sea craves. The ability to savor a slight sliver of subjects across the realm of education and, over the years, to refine its flavor, texture, and consistency until it becomes a delicious dessert dish is what hoists UChicago from others. Interweaving students with majors from the norm to the strangely unique, along with the diverse, infinite range of opinions present in from the melange of students in the Core, create a cross of contrasting people and possibilities which propels and excites my mind. Through the UChicago's Core community and learning style, my overflowing aspiration is calming the whirlpool of yearning to learn "why" and "how" things "are" or "do," channeling it into a singular torrent, with liters upon gallons upon sydarbs of knowledge in the sciences, humanities, mathematics, and all other scholastic silt carried through currents of coursework, and surging down stream with it, wherever that river may flow.

trishhha 8 / 19  
Dec 11, 2011   #2
I think your essay was very well written and unique! It definitely is not a cliche essay and it flows pretty well. Goodluck :)
sohaibsiddiqui 3 / 18  
Dec 17, 2011   #3
Great job. Perfect transitions, good coherence. It has substance and reads well. Not too wordy.

overall, very good.


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