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Syracuse - writing supplements - Short Answers 'my mother, Millicent, is my idol'



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Nov 27, 2013   #1
Who or what influenced you to apply to Syracuse University?
When it comes to sacrifice, my mother, Millicent, is my idol; she's a vehement and altruistic woman that puts her family and her children above all others. When it comes to ambition, my sister, Jennifer, is my idol; she's a woman flooded with perseverance and determination. They have become my nurturers, having been brought up by their side admiring their willpower, I have been influenced to follow the best of opportunities. Their charisma has inspired me to pursue my objective in attending a university that suits my personal interests and a university that excels in the academic field. Syracuse University is a superb institution that allows students to explore various terrains that will diversify my mentality, helping me in comprehending the perspectives of both my family and the world's populace.

Who is the person you dream of becoming and how do you believe Syracuse University can help you achieve this?
I don't dream of becoming anyone in particular, I only dream of becoming the best man I could be. A person that can support his mother at old age and a person who at the end of each day can say he's happy. My ambition isn't to possibly become a millionaire. I seek the opportunity to aid those that have been stripped of their voices and opinions by oppressive forces. By attending Syracuse University, my diploma and my merit will create new possibilities for me to assist those constrained in the future.

If you have had work experience, what skills and/or knowledge did you gain?
In the summer of 2013, I traveled to the Dominican Republic to take part in a religious program that educated the poor of Juan Dolio on religion. I was an English to Spanish and vice versa translator for the American and British missionaries who had organized the program. Through my four-week period of participation, I was able to complete a total of 100 hours of community service. Along with the religious teachings of the program, the missionaries and volunteers aided the people by providing them with medication, nutrition, and recreational activities. During spare time, I took care of children (ages 3 to 7), keeping them entertained by playing baseball, and attending to them while at the beaches. The Dominican Republic taught me that even when face-to-face with destitution children could still smile and their spirits could be lifted when a simple hand or word of encouragement is lent to them.

Based on your interests, tell us what real-world experiences you might pursue during your education at Syracuse as part of the University's Mission, Scholarship in Action?

Personally, my style of learning is through experiences, not by examining the pages of a textbook and memorizing answers. True education does not derive from remembrance, but actually from absorbing and appreciating information. One could learn about Paris from the words on a sheet of paper, but until one sets foot in the city, one does not know the true splendor the City of Lights offers.

I consider myself a Global citizen, not only an American citizen. As a person who has moved to different regions and a different country, I comprehend the value of incorporating new ideologies. While at Syracuse University, I intend to follow my interest in learning languages. Through the university's language program, that offers Italian, French, Spanish, German, Hebrew, Arabic and more, I wish to continue my passion for languages. A particular language says much about a society and allows a person to comprehend distinct peoples and their culture.

Studying abroad will be an experience that Syracuse University can accomplish for me. To be truly capable to grasp the history, the art, and the lessons of a new territory will be magnificent. A person's outlook on life cannot change unless they are exposed to a plethora of diversity and a new community.

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Nov 29, 2013   #2
In your first paragraph of the first prompt, you should specify who had encouraged you to apply to the specific university instead of saying that your family has influenced to follow the best of opportunities. For your third prompt, write about a skill or knowledge that you have gained. You wrote mainly about your experiences and reactions. Your other essays seem fine. Also, reread your essays and fix some sentences with any grammatical errors and make some of them more understandable.


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