"talent, enjoyment, and career" - Johns Hopkins (Why International Studies?)

why did you choose this major?

I personally believe that when choosing a major, there are three things that must be met: talent, enjoyment, and career. Talent alone cannot be a reason good enough for me to decide on a major because I may be good at it but not find it interesting and vice versa. In addition, I do not see why I will have to major in a field that does not relate to the job I want to have in the future.

I know that I will enjoy majoring in International Studies from my experience in Model United Nations and Politics class, and from what I have seen on my report cards, I am pretty good at social studies. I love the atmosphere and enthusiasm when people speak out their thoughts that are not only based on written information on textbooks, the intense moments, and the applause for a speech which offers something new to the plate. Diplomacy is what I am considering for my future career, and International Studies at Johns Hopkins is pretty much the best major for it. So why not International Studies for my major at Johns Hopkins?

comments pleaseeeee :)

hm, how about some more details about your experience in model UN? International studies? Do you have interests in other countries, other points of view. Expand more on why you enjoy it.

thankss :)
is my grammar okay?

...three criteria things that must be met: talent, enjoyment, and career. -----Hey, I like these three as a model for decision-making!

Use a comma in any compound sentence: Talent alone cannot be a reason good enough for me to decide on choose a major, because I may...

Sometimes it is easy to trim away the word "that"
I know that I will enjoy majoring

Another good sentence here: I love the atmosphere and enthusiasm when people speak out their thoughts that are not only based on written information on in textbooks, but also on the intense moments, and the applause for after a speech. which offers something new to the plate .----great idea, but the sentence needed some changes.

Diplomacy is what I am considering for my future career ---- if you are serious about this, you are probably reading about current IR events, such as the treaty with Russia, military presence in Afghanistan, Wikileaks, and other fascinating current events. Show that you are reading about current events. :-)

You need to expand more on why international studies. Talk about some events and about any experience you have with international relations because they will really be impressed and they want to know about you.

Good luck and please read my essay and tell me what you think.