I was a great swimmer in primary school
Since the focus of the essay is on table tennis, this menor mention is not needed. It is an unnecessary discussion deviation that will only confuse the reviewer.
Table tennis played a huge role in shaping my personality
Merge this with the first paragraph.This must be included there as this contains the character discussion push of the essay.
The essay focuses on the importance of your successes as a player. Try to develop the character building aspect. How did the losses make you a better person? Yes, the loss aspect should be discussed. In fact, it is a more noteworthy presentation than the success. The character of a person is generally strengthened by loss through humility, lessosas learned, and character adjustment based upon how loss is handled.