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"Time is ticking." - Johns Hopkins Supplement ----


mal_nerak 2 / 4  
Dec 26, 2009   #1
Johns Hopkins offers 50 majors across the schools of Arts and Sciences and Engineering. On this supplement, we ask you to identify one or two that you might like to pursue here. Why did you choose the way you did? If you are undecided, why didn't you choose? (If any past courses or academic experiences influenced your decision, you may include them in your essay.)

Time is ticking.

Impatiently twirling my pencil between my fingers, I constantly sneak quick glances at the clock. There are a few minutes left before the bell rings, signaling the start of the class period. Today, these short minutes feels like long hours. Our physiology class is performing a brain dissection, a lab that I have been looking forward to since the beginning of the semester. Finally, the bell rings and the class separates into nine groups of four and the sheep brains are distributed to each group. The first thing we need to do is divide the left and right hemispheres of the brain. As we are performing the lab, our teacher, Mrs. Dhala, is walking around, making sure that we are following the procedures correctly and giving us trivial information about the three-pound chunk of tissue in front of us. However, the piece of information she told me was far from trivial. She told me that biology and psychology, especially behavior, influence each other; like a puzzle, one is not complete without the other. What I learned in that fifty-five minute class period changed my perception of not only biology but also psychology. Something that I initially though were two fields that can never be intertwined actually go together, hand in hand.

I am fascinated by how the mind affects our daily lives and at the same time, I am enthralled by how the body adapts to maintain homeostasis. I plan to major in behavioral biology because it applies psychology principles to the biological context. This blended major gives me the opportunity to explore the different fields without worry. My dream is to study medicine and become a pediatrician. The behavioral biology major aids me by not only containing all the coursework needed to fulfill the pre-medicine requirements but also granting me the chance to try something new and gain from this experience. John Hopkins University's Krieger School of Art and Sciences is the only colleges, out of all the colleges that I have researched so far, that offers this unique major. With its help, I will be able to deepen my knowledge in the medical field and psychological field, thus allowing me to be well-rounded and different. The knowledge that I will gain from the university will help me better the lives of children who suffer and live in fear of illnesses.

Please proofread and critique my essay as harshly as you'd like.
Thank you!
z4evafoolz 7 / 31  
Dec 26, 2009   #2
Karen,

read my other replies to all the other people (like seriously..), I'm never like this but i'll give you one word for your essay.

PERFECT.
OP mal_nerak 2 / 4  
Dec 26, 2009   #3
Thank you Ahnsik for the compliment.
Are there any grammatical problems that need to be resolved or is it ready to be submitted?
z4evafoolz 7 / 31  
Dec 26, 2009   #4
I believe it's grammatically perfect too - I couldn't find any mistakes. It's really well focused and well developed. I think its ready to be submitted :).
EF_Kevin 8 / 13,321 129  
Dec 30, 2009   #5
Today, these short minutes feels like long hours.

Change that to feel instead of feels.

What I learned in that fifty-five minute class period changed my perception of not only of biology, but also of psychology. Something that I initially though were t Two fields that I once thought were like opposites can actually compliment one another. never be intertwined actually go together, hand in hand.

I am fascinated by how the mind affects our daily lives and at the same time, I am enthralled by how the body adapts to maintain homeostasis.----> this sentence has good observation, but the essay will be better if you put another sentence BEFORE this sentence... one that expresses your purpose rather than your fascination. Express your purpose, and then use this fascination to support the notion that you should pursue this purpose.

:-)


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