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Transfer essay about discovering the pharmaceutical field as a career path - Common App Prompt



bloomdalerx 1 / -  
Oct 16, 2017   #1
"Please provide a statement that addresses your reasons for transferring and the objectives you hope to achieve"

Discovering Careers for Future



The first thing I ever wanted to be in my life was a Lawyer, simple, safe and rewarding. For a few years after that decision, I felt content, but as both my interests and I grew I wanted to be a fashion designer. The thought was thrilling, a fast paced ever evolving world with many risks and challenges. The thought was as foreign to me as 'Stirrings' were to Jonas in The Giver. Afterwards, when I discovered crime dramas I turned to the field of investigative detecting and forensics, more so forensic anthropology. Nearing the end of high school, the business world caught my attention. By the time I graduated, I was completely lost as to any direction for my life. While most of my classmates has known who they were and what they wanted to be for most of high school, I was only just beginning to discover myself. I left high school with one last career in mind acting. Over time, that too faded and for a while, I was lost.

Whilst attending college I began working at a local pharmacy called Jollys Pharmacy, in order to pay for my education. After graduation I stayed on and eventually began working in the administrative office. At the time, I had no interest in my field of Pharmacy itself. English and Literature had always been my forte, and I wanted to explore it as much as possible, yet there was always a fascination for the medical and healthcare field. At work, I had taken part in the internal pharmacy technician course for fun and passed. A few months later, the founder of the pharmacy passed away. He was an admirable individual and family friend and his death hit the entire country hard. During that time of mourning, I realised how much I truly appreciated all that he did for people while working in the pharmacy and I wanted to help other just like he did.

For the first time in my life, I was certain about my future, I wanted to be a Pharmacist. The more I thought about it the more it embodied the aspects I liked most in my previous choices. The rewards and ability of being a Lawyer, the forever fast paced and changing world of fashion design, the intensive knowledge associated with forensics, the constant communication of the business world and the ability to play many roles in a patient's life like an actress.

Knowing the hard work ahead of me, I am ready to do what it takes in order to become the best Pharmacist that I an be. Like my high school alma mater's moto says "Labor Omnia Vincit", Hard Work Conquerors All, and that is exactly what I plan to do in University. My aim is to become a more disciplined and educated individual so that I too one day, will be helping those around to be the most healthier versions of themselves.

LUBR2310 2 / 5  
Oct 17, 2017   #2
Hi @bloomdalerx here are some corrections that might help you:

1. The first thing I ever wanted to be in my life ... --->
- Since it is an app prompt essay, I believe you should write in more formal style.
- My first goal is to become a lawyer because it is simple and safe yet rewarding. or
- To become a lawyer is the job that I want to achieve when I was a teenager because it is simple and safe yet rewarding.

2. For a few years after that decision, I felt content,...--->
- Few years after that decision, I feel satisfied with the achievements that I made. However, as time goes by, I grew up so did my interest and at that time, I wanted to be a fashion designer.
Holt  Educational Consultant - / 15461  
Oct 17, 2017   #3
Wynante, the essay doesn't require you to make a list of all your unfulfilled career plans. You just need to present the information based upon your current college major in relation to the shift in your educational interests. As the prompt says, you just need to address your reasons for transferring. So the details of previous college major considerations doesn't really need to be in this presentation. Rather, the focus should be on why your current major is unable to satiate your desire for a proper education in this particular field. That is done in comparison with the reasons why you want to change your career path. This is a discussion that is easy to summarize provided you know exactly how to transition your discussion from Point A to Point B in a manner that can easily merge the two explanations into a logical explanation for a major career change while still in college. I would totally remove paragraph 1 and just develop a more complete discussion of the remaining paragraphs because those are the relevant reasons in relation to the discussion.


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