Prompt: discuss an activity or organization that you have participated in or are currently participating in outside of your own cultural group.
The limit is up to 400 words. My essay, however, is 574! I was not able to shorten it, because I felt every sentence had deep meaning. Please help with this, thank you!!!
As we were walking through Tel Aviv, Israel, the aromas of semolina cakes and Burekas overwhelmed us with a yearning to try some. In the market, there were also many brightly-colored orange trees. Kids were having fun, it was a welcoming feeling. This image turned into a dramatic one when my father suspected a man stealing something from my mother's purse. The hair on my hands was standing up, and I felt light-headed. Both my father and the man were screaming at each other in their own languages; a language barrier was set. I was screaming to my dad that the man was merely trying to put back my mother's cell phone that dropped out.
I came about this opportunity to travel to Israel from my own genuine interest to learn about Israel's dynamic culture my relatives talked about when I was younger, and to also learn about Israel's political and economic state as well. While we were driving back to our relative's apartment, I realized that our culture and Israel's are vastly different in terms of traditions and customs. It is crucial to understand these differences before traveling to any country. The assimilation will be easier. While I was in the car, I noticed something peculiar: a beautiful scene of purple orchids. This soothed my mind after the market experience.
The next day, our plans were to go to Jerusalem. Before we left, our relatives warned us of the chaotic scenes; this did not sway us. When we arrived, there was a sign that said "No Crossing!" People were crying in the streets. A bomb had exploded. Our hearts pounded and we were speechless. We also observed a glimpse of poverty, and religious tension as well. I realized that even though two Jews could live thousands of miles apart, they still feel the same patriotic feelings for their country, a closely knit brotherhood. Later on, we observed a festive group of kids dancing to folk music in the middle of the street. This made me realize that these people can find a positive side of life, even though a 911-like scene can happen daily. In Jerusalem, there was also this sense that people valued their religion, unlike any place I've seen on earth.
If I am given the chance to attend Michigan State University, one of my main priorities will be to share my experiences of the Israeli culture, from the violence to the tranquil meadows. In effect, this will allow the students to have a greater awareness of the cultures that make up our world, and how some are less fortunate than others. I would also discuss the ambitions and passions these cultures have in life. In Michigan State University, I would join the xxxx club to contribute both my knowledge and passion. This will allow me to continue my goal of exploring more cultures, and finding unique stories, people, and traditions in each one. I would also become volunteer and leader in the community.
The limit is up to 400 words. My essay, however, is 574! I was not able to shorten it, because I felt every sentence had deep meaning. Please help with this, thank you!!!
As we were walking through Tel Aviv, Israel, the aromas of semolina cakes and Burekas overwhelmed us with a yearning to try some. In the market, there were also many brightly-colored orange trees. Kids were having fun, it was a welcoming feeling. This image turned into a dramatic one when my father suspected a man stealing something from my mother's purse. The hair on my hands was standing up, and I felt light-headed. Both my father and the man were screaming at each other in their own languages; a language barrier was set. I was screaming to my dad that the man was merely trying to put back my mother's cell phone that dropped out.
I came about this opportunity to travel to Israel from my own genuine interest to learn about Israel's dynamic culture my relatives talked about when I was younger, and to also learn about Israel's political and economic state as well. While we were driving back to our relative's apartment, I realized that our culture and Israel's are vastly different in terms of traditions and customs. It is crucial to understand these differences before traveling to any country. The assimilation will be easier. While I was in the car, I noticed something peculiar: a beautiful scene of purple orchids. This soothed my mind after the market experience.
The next day, our plans were to go to Jerusalem. Before we left, our relatives warned us of the chaotic scenes; this did not sway us. When we arrived, there was a sign that said "No Crossing!" People were crying in the streets. A bomb had exploded. Our hearts pounded and we were speechless. We also observed a glimpse of poverty, and religious tension as well. I realized that even though two Jews could live thousands of miles apart, they still feel the same patriotic feelings for their country, a closely knit brotherhood. Later on, we observed a festive group of kids dancing to folk music in the middle of the street. This made me realize that these people can find a positive side of life, even though a 911-like scene can happen daily. In Jerusalem, there was also this sense that people valued their religion, unlike any place I've seen on earth.
If I am given the chance to attend Michigan State University, one of my main priorities will be to share my experiences of the Israeli culture, from the violence to the tranquil meadows. In effect, this will allow the students to have a greater awareness of the cultures that make up our world, and how some are less fortunate than others. I would also discuss the ambitions and passions these cultures have in life. In Michigan State University, I would join the xxxx club to contribute both my knowledge and passion. This will allow me to continue my goal of exploring more cultures, and finding unique stories, people, and traditions in each one. I would also become volunteer and leader in the community.
