For some, it's politics or sports or reading. For others, it may be researching solar power fuel cells or arranging hip-hop mash-ups. What makes you tick? (200-250 words)
Don't laugh, but I really have a knack for school projects-primarily the ones that require a huge poster board presentation. Although most students consider these types of assignments to be tedious and boring, I believe they have played a fundamental role in my education. They always served as a creative outlet-an escape from the monotonous world of memorization, bookwork, or problem-solving-and allowed me to embrace my hidden love for art. One of my most recent projects, for instance, was a poster for the Italian film "I Ladri di Biciclette." Naturally, I became so engrossed in the design that I lost track of time, and by 3 AM there were scrap drawings of bicycles covering my dining room floor. It was as if I entered a two-dimensional universe, free from any stress, tension, or judgment. There were no formulas to remember, no grammatical rules to fuss over, not even a scientific principle to keep in mind. All I needed were some markers, paper, a poster board, a glue stick, a pair of scissors, and my imagination. Most of all, I loved incorporating my own personality into the task and watching my artistic talent develop into something truly spectacular from mere doodles in the margins of my notebooks. Despite my penchant for math and science, I realized that I am far from creatively inept; I am an imaginative young adult-who definitely knows how to put together a school project.
This might be too informal.
I have no idea. I usually don't use contractions in my writing, but I figured it might be alright because Tufts seems to be super casual.
I know it needs some work, but let me know what you think.
Don't worry about contractions. I've used them all in my college essays, and especially for Tufts, it's going to be fine.
Overall, school projects don't seem like the most exciting thing you could talk about. But if it's really your thing, go for it.
The writing itself is superb, except the last sentence.
Despite my penchant for math and science, I realized that I am far from creatively inept; I am an imaginative young adult-who definitely knows how to put together a school project.
First, I don't think there's a negative correlation between liking math and science and being creative. or it's actually more like a positive correlation. Also, get rid of the hyphen or whadduuyacallit. "I am an imaginative young adult who definitely knows how to put together a school project. "
"who definitely knows how to put together a school project. " - this is kind of weak. I mean, what Tufts applicant doesn't know how to put together a school project? Think of a stronger finish.
I've humbly offered my opinion, you don't have to take it.
Thanks, and help me out too!
Thanks a ton!
I'll be sure to rewrite that last sentence. :)
Slightly edited last sentence:
"... Despite the fact that I have often been branded with the "left-brained" stereotype, I've realized that I am far from creatively inept, and this brings me insurmountable pride."
What do you guys think?
More opinions would be greatly appreciated!
It's certainly an interesting/off beat answer. I like it! (But then I myself tend that way perhaps a bit too much...) It provides an interesting dimension to what may seem like a typical math/science person. That being said, now I want to know more about your background - are you going to major in math/science? Do you plan to combine the two in design, engineering or architecture? It certainly makes me curious, and I'm sure it'll make Tuft curious as well.
I think the topic is very original. You will definitely stick out.
The first couple of sentences could be improved; They always served-- "They have always served" I don't know, I think it may sound better.
Great Essay overall!
Thanks guys!
And yes djkang I am going to major in a math-science discipline, specifically pre-med. But I'd love to study art as well.
