Tulane - "Exactly the school I need" - SOP Prompt

This is a very very rough draft but I'm having trouble coming up with ideas

The more I learn about Tulane, the more I feel how perfect of a fit it is for me. Yes, it has a very recognized name and reputation, but that is not what draws me to the school. Of all the amazing programs, values, and unique qualities the school possesses, the generous financial aid and encouragement for research really appeals to me.

I was unable to attend a university right out of high school due to financial hardships, but Tulane offers so many different opportunities for scholarships, loans, and grants. The easily-accessible and abundant information and resources about financial aid has been something I really admired about the school. There are links, instructions, encouragement, and everything a financially challenged student like me could ask for.

Everywhere I look research is promoted within the university. At every other school I have looked at, research is not a huge part of the education. Having the option to participate in research is extremely valuable to me because I want to study things like treatment and solutions to addictions and personality disorders. I want nothing more than to attend a university that holds the same things I do at such high standards.

You can start off by talking about how you became interested in a particular course earlier in your academic life but then was prevented from further pursuing it due to financial difficulties. Then go into a discussion of their scholarship grants. In particular, discuss the grant that you are interested in and how you feel it can help you achieve your goals in life. Don't forget to talk about their research grants as well, making mention of a particular research prompt that you have been toying with for some time now. After all of that discussion, you can present the reasons as to why you feel you will be a perfect fit not only for Tulane, but for their scholarships as well. Let them know what your plans are for your time as a student and then 5 years after graduation. Explain how you will help promote Tulane as a leading center of learning by becoming an active student leader and advocate for the scholarship programs after you graduate. Those are just some ideas to start you off. I believe you will develop some other ideas for yourself from that point on. I hope these points help :-D Good Luck!

Scrap the first sentence. This should be what the whole essay is about.
Show, show, show.
We should be able to see yourself doing X academic programs in X library, eating at X dining hall, and participating in X clubs.

You talk about the money, but you don't give them a reason to give it to you over another kid.
Talk about the research you hope to get involved in.

I would say put this essay aside. Go on tulane's website, collegexpress, collegeprowler and make a list of things you like about the school. Go through all their clubs. Go through your ideal academic program (even if you don't know, its good to show how you would be a good fit for one, an underserved one might give you an advantage)

And start off with a middle of a story. And research these Why X school essays . I know a good one I found was one with american university and the dream act.

Good luck!