Alright Tamara, that first paragraph is boring and sort of monotone!! So, you are a smarty, a goodie goodie who likes to help other people with their work!! ha ha, well I can relate to that, and I'm glad you are here because we need a lot of people at EssayForum who help other students.
But look at how boring some of the sentences are:
My intellectual curiosity led me to spend hours reading about several topics in science or solving math problems in game books.
You are a good student, so you might be too serious. If you look at your first 2 paragraphs, you might realize that you do not need to tell the reader everything about it... just tell the reader what she needs to know. Let her wonder.
Cut out some details, and say something unexpected... something bold.
This part is great: In a simple view I found out that people hate some subjects, like math, because of the complicated a problem could be for them. A deeper look ... because they did not understand the simpler ones.
----very impressive stuff, very specific and meaningful, worth my time to read.
I love the discussion about helping students with the basics as their foundation.
This is what I want you to add to the essay: silly phrases games
I would say that my tutoring classes during high school were successful. Some of my classmates increased their grades from an average 3 to a perfect 5 in math score to a complete and well done exam in chemistry and logic. ----- congratulations, very cool.