UBC Personal Profile Essay
Hey, I've written the admission essay for UBC. Please feel free to provide your opinion and your comments on my essay. Thank you.
And is it acceptable if I exceed the word limit by a few words?Tell us about who you are. How would your family, friends, and/or members of your community describe you? If possible, please include something about yourself that you are most proud of and why. (maximum 250 words)
Born as a second child in the developing country of Nepal, all the typical hopes and expectations, of being a studious person who grew up either to be a doctor or an engineer were placed on me even before I understood what those professions entailed. I still remember when I heeded those hopes and said that I would grow up to be an astronaut or a scientist; who invented a capsule that could clean Bagmati river in a single day. But sadly, my childish dreams grew with me as I slowly started to grasp the reality of the situation. The once talkative boy who stated his dreams like they were words to a national anthem started to choose his words carefully and created a tight space around him, taking minimum risks and calculating his every action. About the same time everyone around me also started to read the atmosphere that surrounded me and slowly but surely recognized me to be an introverted person.
I stayed as an introvert for majority of my teenage years, but the continuous comfort zone that it provided felt lacking to me. With time that feeling started to grow more stronger causing me to take part in something that I could have never dreamed of; jumping from an 80m tall bridge. The experience that the bungee jump provided, felt like a revelation to me making me realize the joy and ecstasy that prevailing the unexpected could provide which I'm sure will be invaluable throughout my lifetime.