Prompt:
Why did you choose to apply to UCF?
My Essay:
Ever since I started looking for colleges, UCF has always caught my eye. I like the atmosphere that UCF portrays. It's an atmosphere of distinction and poise, but also of friendship and caring. I've always wanted to graduate from a university that's well known, while also enjoying the time I spend with the new people I meet. Not too many universities seem to offer that choice, but luckily, it seems that I've found that at UCF.
Additionally, looking through a number of pictures, I've fallen in love with the beautiful campus at UFC. The architecture of the buildings, the amazing landscape and just the overall grandeur of it all really calls out to me. I get excited just thinking of potentially being able to live on campus and experiencing the beauty of my new "home" up close.
Also, I've heard great things about the UCF graphic design program. I'm planning on graduating with a degree in graphic design and starting my own company in the future. I believe that with the advanced curriculum of UCF's art department, I can really achieve my goal in the long run.
I applied to UCF because it just seems like the college I've always wanted to attend. It seems like a place where I can reach my life goals and have fun doing it, a place where my time will not have been spent in vain. And what can I say...I look damn good in black and gold.
- In addition to general feedback about the essay I would like for someone to review the last sentence and give me their opinion about using the word "damn". I know you shouldn't use profanity in your admission essays, but I whole heartedly do not consider the word damn to be profane when used in this context. On the contrary, I believe damn adds some personality and humor to the essay, but that's just my opinion.
Thanks for reading
Thank you very much for your thoughts. I wrote this yesterday and when I read it again today I realized the last line does in fact sound much more vain than I intended it to. Good thing I didn't send it in :P
But yeah, I'm definitely going to include more acute details in my descriptions.
Thanks again for your help
