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University of Rochester supplement: good fit + diff. point of views.



kda013 6 / 13  
Dec 28, 2009   #1
1. What makes the University of Rochester a good fit for you? In answering, identify your sources of information, including any conversations you've had with Rochester faculty, staff, students, or alumni.

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After visiting the University of Rochester, I found several qualities of Rochester to be a good fit for me. The Rochester students told me that they thrive in an international community, marked by the diversity of cultures that I value. Through conversing with a faculty member, I learned that Rochester provides a vibrant research programs in its curriculum. This would allow me to gain broad knowledge and experience in the field of Biology which I plan to study in the School of Nursing. The best quality that I admire about Rochester curriculum is that it has no required subjects. Thanks to its flexibility, I can take more chances. I more than welcome these chances that Rochester offers.

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2.Rochester students represent many different points of view. Each student constructs an independent study and research plan. Describe what you will contribute to Rochester's diversity of ideas, experiences, and identities. If you can, incorporate a positive past experience where you chose your own learning path, or a negative experience where you wanted to exercise more independence.

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In high school, I loved to do most activities with only one exception: science lab. Our Biology lab required each student to demonstrate team work. In spite of my passion for Biology subject, I could not see the necessity for sharing the work and effort with others. Having stressed individuality, I felt that one would do the 'real' thinking process and the rest would get the same credit for what was not theirs. Although time and energy were consumed, sharing the amount of work did not bring any feeling of achievement. However in some rare occasions, some groups comprised people who were actually unique and each had something to contribute. I believe such people are Rochester students. With my principle of individuality, I will contribute to the Meliora: Ever better Rochester community like those students.

these are the short answers
i need your advice
i'm hoping this would be my final one..

the word limit should be 125,, but my second one is 135..which i really couldnt
shorten any further... help..
pls. leave a comment ;]

LewisClark13 1 / 8  
Dec 28, 2009   #2
Hi! I think that for the second one, being off my 10 words isn't too big of a deal. i don't think that the admissions people will be nit picking and counting every word. If they do, then they're wasting thier time.

Again, for the second one, I liked how you included that you are an individual. However, I thought that it was a bit plain. Maybe cut out the first sentenceIn high school, I loved to do most activities with only one exception: science lab and jump right into the lab activity with the teamwork. I think that it'll bring so much more depth to the short piece and bring some fun to it as well!

I found several qualities of Rochester to be a good fit for me.

I don't think that the sentence is really necessary. Maybe use those words to include some more "why I love rochester" conversations with the students. Overall, I believed that you like Rochester!

Please take a look at my essay and tell me what you think!
EF_Kevin 8 / 13053  
Jan 4, 2010   #3
found several qualities of Rochester to be a good fit for me ... provides a vibrant research programs...

This stuff aove is too general. Don't waste any words with general things. These are the sorts of things you are supposed to replace with specific observations (i.e. the philosophy of _______, the head of the _____ department, Dr. ________, and the ___________ club all make Rochester a good fit for me.)

LewisClark, this is another great bit of feedback you gave here. I see that you only posted one essay; I'm going to help with that now.

In high school, I loved to do most activities with only one exception: science lab. Our Biology lab required each student to demonstrate team work. In spite of my passion for Biology...----I think this stuff is well-written, BUT you should not be judgmental at the end about the other people.


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