'unstable situation in my country' - Brown: If you could do anything without failing

Hello and thank you for your time. Here are two different responses and I don't know which one to pick:

Complete the thought: If I could do anything without the risk of failing I would... (200 Characters)

I would learn all the languages in the world. I find languages fascinating. Some might say, five are already impressive, but I would love to understand all of them. This would allow me to communicate globally.

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I would find a way to fix the unstable situation in my country. I would round up all those who want to make a change and we would help establish a solid government by fair elections and fighting corruption.

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I would also very much appreciate any advice as to how I could reduce the number of characters.

I would learn all the languages in the world. Languages are fascinating. Some might say, five are impressive, but I would love to understand all of them. This would allow me to communicate globally.

i think this sounds more concise and still conveys the message

do you think the first one is better than the second?

personally i like the first one just a little bit more it add a different edge onto your supplement, and i feel that everyone else applying would say something similar to the second.

The thing is I already talk a lot about diversity and discovering the world and living in different places, speaking five languages in my commonapp. That's why I wasn't sure.

Thank you!

no problem!!

I prefer the second one. I didn't like how you say "Some might say, five are already impressive". But, I think you can tone it down.


I would learn all the languages in the world. I find languages fascinating. I would love to understand all of them to communicate globally.

Thank you @chewbaccablack !

No problem :) I would appreciate it if you could go over my essay too

sure, no problem!

First one fo' sho!

It's very unique and shows that you like being diverse.

Second is a bit cliche in the 'I want world peace' sense.

Please check mine out?